New writer looking for critique...

[gentlehand]

Yes... I'm actually asking for your critical eye (and other parts of your anatomy, if necessary).

I'm a relatively new writer and new poster to literotica.

I'd appreciate suggestion and critique (including the "rip out the guts and feed em' to the writer) on what I've posted.

You see - I actually want to get better.

My current story is posted at http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=330949

Thanks - gh

 

[xssve]

Hard to crit a WIP, pretty good opening hook, and you created a bit of anticipation at the end to get 'em to turn the page - didn't drag in the middle, so I'm gonna say so far so good. Others with more experience at literary criticism can probobly help more with the details.

 

[starrkers]

May I suggest duplicating this thread in the Story Feedback Forum? There's lots of good folk over there that will give you good advice/criticism.

 

[gentlehand]

Thank you!

Thank you to you both... I missed the "Story Feedback Forum". Need new eyes, I guess.

I'll post this one over there.

gh