New Writer ATTACKED!!! Please advise...

[cremebrulee]

Hello, all. I a a new writere, just got my first story posted and recieved a horribly rude feedback comment.
I am copying it here so you can give me advice.


This message contains feedback for: cremebrulee
About the submission: Greatfully Tutored
This feedback was sent by: Anonymous

Comments:

you a new author? usin' big words you can't even spell and using them wrong to boot. here's a review for you...quit wasting important people's time with your drivel. greatfully tutored -- what a cute name -- is a steaming pile of dogshit. oh, is that two words. you asshole.

Is there nothing I can do besides turning off the anonymous feedback?
I thought this went a tad too far, and I am a very open person. I realize we're all entitled to our opinions and that's brilliant and freedom of speech and all, but this is a downright attack, not only on the spelling (which , by the way, was intentional.. Greatfully was spelled that way as a play on words and is very accurate) but on the authors character as well.
Maybe I am just being too thin sknned here, but it really pissed me off to have no chance to respond.

I am posting a link to the stry in question, and if everyone hinks it's a steming pile of dogshit I will ask to have it removed.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=75278


It sure did turn me on when it happened! (yes ~ it's a true story)

Thanks for the listen,

~Creme Brulee

 

[cremebrulee]

grrrrrrrrrrr

LOL... I made myself look really good, huh?
The keys are sticking mike MAD on my keyboard....
wonder why

~Creme

 

[kelley_and_tracy]

My response

Please look for my new thread. I am in the process of constructing my thoughts as to the exact intent of the message I want to convey. Keep your chin up! Tracy

 

[DarlingNikki]

Wow. Ok, first of all, your story is NOT a steaming pile of crap. But you knew that.

I haven't been here very long, but from reading a few of the messages, I've gathered that getting a few rude anonymous feedbacks is par for the course. I just submitted my first story, which is pending, and I imagine that if it's accepted, I'll also get one or more of those little nuggets. I plan to ignore them.

I don't know who you are writing for. Yourself? Someone special? A general audience? Whoever it is, you are probably NOT writing to someone who would anonymously say something that rude and crude to a stranger. Which means you get to ignore it. You'll probably get appreciative feedback too, as well as some constructive critisism - that is what you need to pay attention to.

YOU are the important person, not him - don't let HIM waste YOUR time.

 

[cremebrulee]

THANKS

Thanks for the encouraging words... I have such a sensitive side!!

I will keep writing and doing it for the sheer pleasure of it. Maybe I can give someone else that pleasure too. Ya never know...

As far as the #@$&#^@%@@#*& that shared his most intelligent wit with me, I will try to let that old water run right off my back.

Hugs all...
~Creme


PS~ Please do send comments/criticisn so I can learn learn learn ( about writing...)

 

[kelley_and_tracy]

Please review my new thread, "My Opinion"

 

[KillerMuffin]

You can't please everyone. At some point in your writing life--when you write for public consumption that is--someone is going to hate your writing and will feel it their mission in life to tell you about it.

This is what you do:

Ignore the email.


No, really. I get hatemail like that pretty frequently. I've been called everything from a nasty Republican bitch to the worst writer in existence, don't quit your day job.

It's not the best story out there, but it's not the worst, either. It's your first and you're new at this. It takes time and practice to get good at anything and writing is no exception. You probably won't be Hemingway or Anais Nin anytime in your life (bad odds), but you're not garbage either.

So, open up your word processor and write down another story. Then submit it. For everyone you do it wrong for there are dozens (at the very least!) of others that you do it right for. Keep writing if you enjoy sharing it. Leave your email open because there are people who do want to say nice things to you.

There is nothing you can do about hatemail other than delete it and move on. You can turn the feature off, but you'll be denying yourself the good stuff that comes in. Don't let a creep ruin the experience for you.

 

[DarlingNikki]

Are you asking for feedback here in this thread? (I am still feeling my way around the ettiquette around here.)

 

[dr_mabeuse]

That's okay, Creme. You've been bombed by an asshole is all. It happens to all of us.

These people don't even bother to read the stories they bomb. I know someone whose story was letter perfect as to spelling and punctuation who got a poison pen letter telling her to learn how to write. Ot's just crap, pure and simple.

You'll also learn that how your story rates doesn't mean much either. Just like there;'s people who bomb you with feedback, there are poeople who just automatically give every story they read a '1'. They find that fun.

If you really want worthwhile feedback, post a link to your story in the "Story feedback" board and you'll get some constructive and thoughtful criticism.

Ignore the assholes.

---dr.M.

 

[cremebrulee]

To dr_mabeuse

Thanks for the encouraging words, Doc!
I have posted my story for feedback on the Story Feeback board and have recieved a few responses that were extremely helpful.

I will post a link to the story here in case anyone is interested in reading it.

Thanks again for the helpful info,

~CremeBrulee

 

[cremebrulee]

Nope.

.Fnord.

 

[DarlingNikki]

This is my first attempt at feedback, so I'm not sure if it will be helpful, but...

The time aspect in the beginning is a little confusing. You left the house "that night" and then you jump back to explain you'd been emailing, then here it is two months later, but presumably that same night. Maybe something like "after two months of e-mailing..." would work better? But then you jump into the past again... maybe it's just me.

You have her wonder what she's doing going to meet a 19 year old boy - why? That's what she advertised for, isn't it? I wondered why she was suddenly so doubt filled. What is she so worried about? That she'll corrupt him? That he'll reject her? Is this her first time doing something like that?

You describe the sex dialogue they have over the computer - why not let us listen in instead? It would be hot and also give us some insight into their personalities.

Most of the story describes how excited she is to meet this guy, and you do mention that she's dying to suck his cock, but she's so worked up that she starts masturbating in the restroom and then the story ends without her getting off too? As I said, I'm new at this, so there could be an aspect I'm missing, but when I read it, I identified with her and her desire, so the end was kind of a letdown. Either have him do something for her or explain why, after all that anticipation, she doesn't want it.

Also I'm kind of wondering why they knew having a real relationship isn't a possibility. Just the age difference? When I read that, I just thought, hey, why not? Even one line explaining differences in life experience or whatever would have convinced me.

I liked the buildup of how excited she is, and I liked the sex part... I guess (for me) it's just a matter of tightening it up and adding some motivations. It's not another tab A, slot B story, which is nice. Don't remove it, and do write another one.

 

[cremebrulee]

Thanks Nikki

I really appreciate the candid criticism/feedback.
I wasn't really thinking of submitting the story as I wrote it in about 10-15 minutes in a heated passionate meoment after Michael and I had just finfished another online session (yes, I came in that one!) and I said to myself,"What the hell".


I will work on the clarification at the beginning . I can see now where that might be a bit confusing .

I am not justifying, but the reason she was uneasy was seeing the reality that she was really going to meet her online lover. It had not hit her until then. Your point was well made and I will do some revising to make that addition as well as others.
You're right, I should have gotten more into the details of how he begged me with every message he sent,how he said "Damn, this is so fucking hot. You're gonna make me cum" and so forth.
Another point well made.

I still think the reality of the relationship is that it is what it is. A mutual pleasuring and learning experience. Neither of us haveany desire for a long term relationship, hence the coment...

I didn't get the point across that I am a giver, plain and simple. I would rather have had him cum than to get there myself.

As you can probably tell, it's atrue story.
I think that's why the ending was such a letdown (is it ever! I can see it plain as day now).We never have gotten that far ~ not yet.
I didn't know where to go, but "Michael" is still a virgin.
How hot is that?!?!?!

I'll write another as soon as we go there.

I can't wait to do the rewrite!

thanks again,
~CremeBrulee

 

[Pookie]

creme,

Don't let that type of feedback slow you down. Everyone gets it at one time or another, especially when they first began writing.

I remember being terrified when I posted my first story. It's very natural, wondering what others will think about it. Just know that there are assholes that will send you nasty feedback once in awhile no matter how good your stories may be.

Just keep writing. Do it for yourself if for no one else. You will get better with time as we all do.

Your writing is not bad. It's a good start. You will get better with experience just as we all do. Read and learn from other authors here. Look at their styles and develop your own over time. You have potential, but experience will make you a better writer.

Pookie

 

[SweetShyness]

i think that comment was totally uncalled for. they could have said "i don't like your story" or "it sucked" (i didn't read your story and i'm sure it doesn't suck!) they didn't have to say all that. they didn't even have the balls to put their name at the end? you should just laugh and move on!

 

[cremebrulee]

HEY HEY HEY!!!!

Thanks for all the feedback ( I feel the LOVE)
and I just needed to say in my drunken state that I am primarily a songwriter, and I am fully aware that that's a different animal alltogether.


BUT~~~~~~~~~~


You should hear some of the really H-O-T positive feedback I have gotten. I know where to go from now on for dates! LOL





I have just died and gone to fantasy heaven!!!

~Creme

 

[NorthwestRain]

God, what an fuckwit!
Chickenshit anonymous wanker.

 

[cremebrulee]

Northwest~

I see your interests there ~

Dark Alleys, WHAT A TURN ON!

I wan to hear more about that soon.

Yummmmmmmmmmmmmmmm


Moist and dreaming,
~Creme

 

[KillerMuffin]

This is my first attempt at feedback, so I'm not sure if it will be helpful, but...

The time aspect in the beginning is a little confusing. You left the house "that night" and then you jump back to explain you'd been emailing, then here it is two months later, but presumably that same night. Maybe something like "after two months of e-mailing..." would work better? But then you jump into the past again... maybe it's just me.

You have her wonder what she's doing going to meet a 19 year old boy - why? That's what she advertised for, isn't it? I wondered why she was suddenly so doubt filled. What is she so worried about? That she'll corrupt him? That he'll reject her? Is this her first time doing something like that?

You describe the sex dialogue they have over the computer - why not let us listen in instead? It would be hot and also give us some insight into their personalities.

Most of the story describes how excited she is to meet this guy, and you do mention that she's dying to suck his cock, but she's so worked up that she starts masturbating in the restroom and then the story ends without her getting off too? As I said, I'm new at this, so there could be an aspect I'm missing, but when I read it, I identified with her and her desire, so the end was kind of a letdown. Either have him do something for her or explain why, after all that anticipation, she doesn't want it.

Also I'm kind of wondering why they knew having a real relationship isn't a possibility. Just the age difference? When I read that, I just thought, hey, why not? Even one line explaining differences in life experience or whatever would have convinced me.

I liked the buildup of how excited she is, and I liked the sex part... I guess (for me) it's just a matter of tightening it up and adding some motivations. It's not another tab A, slot B story, which is nice. Don't remove it, and do write another one.

You give great feedback! Don't stop.

 

[Whispersecret]

If you purposely misspell a word, especially in a title, it might help if you put it in quotation marks, as in

"Greatfully" Tutored

That clues in the reader that there's a reason for the unusual spelling.

 

[MathGirl]

Hello, all. I a a new writere, just got my first story posted and recieved a horribly rude feedback comment.
I am copying it here so you can give me advice.

Dear CB,

Welcome to the reality of the writer's world! I think we have the same "fan" in common. I seem to remember the "steaming pile of dogshit" in a letter when I first started writing.

I've posted several items on Literotica and learned a few things in the process:

Be prepared for nasty letters, and don't take them personally. I know it's like someone calling your baby ugly, but don't let it bother you.

Try to minimize things that people might pick on. E.g. spelling, punctuation, grammar. Those are things you can control, and they shouldn't be ignored.

Be prepared for criticism. My items are neither neither literary nor artistic. I'm not a professional writer. I just write straight narratives. I figure if someone doesn't like what I write, he is free not to read it. I ignore criticism of my style, because I don't really have one.

Don't be offended by reader voting. It's sort of fun, but it will also make you crazy if you pay too much attention to it.

Personally, I love the feedback I get. Especially the illiterate letters and the ones which include poor, out of focus pictures of unremarkable male genitalita. That's fun, and I save them in a special file. Good for a laugh once in a while.

I hope you won't let your bad experience prevent you from writing more. If you don't let the readers wear you down, it's fun.

Diane

 

[cremebrulee]

Whispersoft

Thank you for that. I am currently experiencing such an influx of helpful suggestions that I shall have to rewrite and submit "Greatfully" Tutored again.I look forward to it.

Thank you so much!!

~CremBrulee

 

[gauchecritic]

I'm only guessing here, but all the feedback I've ever received has been of the "It made me so hard/hot/wet" variety.

I realise I'm speaking as a very low percentage poll but here are a couple of reasons why I think some authors get hate feedback.

Maybe it's because the author is female, by nomenclature or profile. I'm not.

Maybe it's because the authors are worth attacking (good writing/story etc) I think I am but perhaps I'm not.

Maybe I've just been lucky so far.

But one thing I do know is; I am now and always have been,

Gauche

 

[cremebrulee]

Gauche

I guess I haven't really shared any of the great feedback I've gotten.

I have, "MORE MORE MORE!!"

and, "Oh, god the tension..."

as well as," I can't wait for the next"

and,"That has always been a fantasy of mine"

and,"Keep on writing"

I haven't gotten anything BUT good feedback, highly constructive criticism and encouragemnt since I posted this thread.

Keep it coming, I am more than willing to learn

~Creme

 

[NorthwestRain]

Hey, (Mathgirl) why is it girls never send photos of their 'genetalitia'. Just once, I would love to see a dirty pic of something I helped make wet.
Come on girls, guys do it! (apparently)