New to writing, looking for help from a literary editor

[Lathanar1]

I am very new to writing and am looking for a literary editor/beta reader. Just really wanting feedback on structure and flow. My grammar may not be the best yet, I am most likely butchering tenses, but I consider that my battle to fight as I learn. My chapters are averaging around 9K words and I have three published so far (two with hot tags, so go me). It is a fantasy setting, the source material is a long running DnD campaign with some non-human sex but pretty vanilla and consensual. Some violence but not in a sexual context. I'm not sure what else I need to add.

 

[AchtungNight]

Drop me a private message and I’ll give you my email for the story. I have been a fantasy writer and D&D dungeon master, so I might be able to help you out.