sir lancelot
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- Jul 14, 2004
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pretty new at this just wondered if anybody thats been around a while could comment on my submission {The Forest} . I enjoyed writing it but wonder what changes would help. It seemed to get my wife going but then she digs me anyway <l o l>. So feel free to tear me up. I have read alot of poems and storys on the site and dont want to submit crap.