New Story

[derek00]

First try, it's mostly a start, but I'd like to have a bit of feedback, anyway:

http://www.chyoo.com:81/index.php/main.story.cover/3125

If there's a more polite way to do this sort of advertising, please let me know.

 

[Torg]

Oooo, she is a little babysitting slut, isn't she. I love it. Nice start, derek.

 

[derek00]

question

I'm keeping my characters of age, but it is legal/proper to have one lie about her age below the legal threshold?

Thanks.

 

[jakelyon]

I'm keeping my characters of age, but it is legal/proper to have one lie about her age below the legal threshold?

Thanks.

I like the story a lot. I will try and add a thread or two to it.

If I was you I would avoid any discussion of any underage characters. I just think that is a line you should not cross. The site comes down pretty hard on any way of even getting close to an underage character in a story.

 

[derek00]

Okay

Fair enough, absolutely. It wasn't crucial, just a thought as to how to get one character ahead on another.

By the way, does Chyoo do anything to anyone anymore?

 

[derek00]

updated

It's gotten to the interesting part now.

 

[Bacteriophage68]

Cripes!

What's this little bugger?