New story up

[PennLady]

I have a new story up, Lessons Learned (3 Lit pages; under 10k words), and would appreciate some feedback on it. It was new territory for me -- lesbian romance -- and so I'm curious what people think.

Thanks.

http://www.literotica.com/s/lessons-learned-14

 

[lovecraft68]

New release on a Sunday? Tough draw I've gotten to the point if it does not post by Saturday I click pending and set it back. I've had crap luck with Sunday.

As for your story.

I left you a comment (I know, ruining the neighborhood over there) and I will repeat here the love/hate knowing she shouldn't but unable to help it was very well handled. It was a great read.

But know something PL? You piss me off.

Just when I look at what I'm working on and feel like I've gotten a lot better and its pretty good....

I read something of yours.

Sighs and kicks a can.

 

[PennLady]

New release on a Sunday? Tough draw I've gotten to the point if it does not post by Saturday I click pending and set it back. I've had crap luck with Sunday.

As for your story.

I left you a comment (I know, ruining the neighborhood over there) and I will repeat here the love/hate knowing she shouldn't but unable to help it was very well handled. It was a great read.

But know something PL? You piss me off.

Just when I look at what I'm working on and feel like I've gotten a lot better and its pretty good....

I read something of yours.

Sighs and kicks a can.

Ah. My work here is done. I kid, I kid.

Thanks for reading and I'm glad you liked it. I even had a consultant, Stella, to help with a couple of thing.

As for posting on Sunday, I had submitted it last Monday and was just waiting to see what happened. It's up on other sites, and I put links on Facebook, my blog, etc., so some people will see the links.

One question -- are you sure you put a comment? Because I don't see one from you (or anonymous). But thanks again for reading!

 

[lovecraft68]

I checked and did not see it. Maybe I forgot ot hit submit after preview? Anyway I added it now.

But I think you should get a point off for bringing in the girl/girl guru Stella

 

[PennLady]

I checked and did not see it. Maybe I forgot ot hit submit after preview? Anyway I added it now.

But I think you should get a point off for bringing in the girl/girl guru Stella

Thanks for the comment.

Well I just had a couple of questions for her. As I told her, I wanted this not to be some frat-boy version of lesbians. Plus I had a toy question.

 

[lovecraft68]

Thanks for the comment.

Well I just had a couple of questions for her. As I told her, I wanted this not to be some frat-boy version of lesbians. Plus I had a toy question.

Oh, like mine?

Toys I could answer, but I'm strictly a lipstick lesbian writer myself. Probably send Stella frothing.

 

[PennLady]

Oh, like mine?

Toys I could answer, but I'm strictly a lipstick lesbian writer myself. Probably send Stella frothing.

I guess I avoided the Lipstick Lesbian trap, although I'm not entirely sure what an LL is. But I'll keep not writing them.

 

[stevieraygovan]

Oh, LLs are wonderful creatures, and there is no reason whatsoever to avoid writing about them. Having just read your story, I would say that yes indeed, that was certainly a LL story...at least in my mind, anyway.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Simply great. Neat balance between sex and emotional conflict. Yes it's LL but not the least worse for that.

Don't see it as 'frat-boy' lesbianism as the story revolves around the emotional friction between the two supported by some sex. The ending proves the point.

Really a true lesbian story and you deserve a pat on the back. Congrats.

 

[PennLady]

Simply great. Neat balance between sex and emotional conflict. Yes it's LL but not the least worse for that.

Don't see it as 'frat-boy' lesbianism as the story revolves around the emotional friction between the two supported by some sex. The ending proves the point.

Really a true lesbian story and you deserve a pat on the back. Congrats.

Thank you.

 

[LWulf]

Already told you what I think about the story. *nods*

 

[PennLady]

Already told you what I think about the story. *nods*

You did, and thanks.

 

[Jim44444]

Great story

Thanks for starting this thread otherwise I would have missed a great story.

A question some what off topic if you will indulge me. Is there value in commenting on an older story? There are so many stories that I have not read and I wonder if I should take the time to comment on ones that have been around for years. I always vote but do not always comment on older stories.

 

[sr71plt]

Thanks for starting this thread otherwise I would have missed a great story.

A question some what off topic if you will indulge me. Is there value in commenting on an older story? There are so many stories that I have not read and I wonder if I should take the time to comment on ones that have been around for years. I always vote but do not always comment on older stories.

Yes, there's value. The comment appears for the author to see on the author's submission page. It also appears on a Feedback section of the Stories page. Apparently readers do check this section, but old stories often get new votes and views and comments after someone has commented on them.

 

[PennLady]

Thanks for starting this thread otherwise I would have missed a great story.

A question some what off topic if you will indulge me. Is there value in commenting on an older story? There are so many stories that I have not read and I wonder if I should take the time to comment on ones that have been around for years. I always vote but do not always comment on older stories.

There's certainly value to the author. I didn't know about the feedback page, or I'd forgotten, but it's good to know new feedback might bump a story's visibility a bit.

And thanks for the feedback.

 

[Lustful_Intentions]

There's certainly value to the author. I didn't know about the feedback page, or I'd forgotten, but it's good to know new feedback might bump a story's visibility a bit.

And thanks for the feedback.

Agreed.

I'm just coming back to Lit after several years away, and I'd certainly like to hear feedback on the one story I do have up right now.