New story : The Dressing Room Dare

[vespanights]

Here is something I am working on. Please share your comments and feedback to me via email. vespanights321@yahoo.com

A few years ago, a girlfriend and I were engaged in a very sexy series of dares. It all started one night at a bar when she was wearing this tight mini skirt. As she danced, the skirt would rise higher and higher and she was constantly pulling it back down to cover herself up. I dared her to just let it rise and she proceeded to bump and grind with me in such a way that part of her ass was actually on display. We left the bar after a few songs and raced back to her place.

Realizing how much it turned us on, we kept upping the ante until I dared her to somehow show herself to a stranger wearing nothing but her bra and panties. This wasn't likely to happen, but even the thought of it led us to have some of our hottest sex.

A week or two went by and I thought nothing of it until she called me one Saturday afternoon and told me to come over to her apartment. When I got there, she was totally blushed and looked embarrased. She said she had to confess something to me.

"I woke up this morning," she told me "thinking about your last dare. I had an idea about how I could pull it off so I drove to the mall right after they openned and started to shop".

"I was in Dillard's a few weeks ago and there was this young clerk who was a little eager to help me shop. So I went back to his department, which was almost empty, and found him there again. I approached him and told him that I was looking for a dress to wear and asked for his help."

"He looked a little confused because he didn't work in the dress department and I so I told him that I needed a man's opinion because I wanted to be sure I got something sexy. He smiled, taking my bait, and flirted with me, telling me that anything I bought was sure to look sexy. I knew I had him".

"We went through the dresses and, luckily, it was early enough for the department to be pretty empty. Together, we decided on three different dresses that I took to the dressing room. I asked him to wait outside and let me try them on. He looked so embarrased but so turned on."

"I tried on the first dress and walked out of the dressing room area to show myself to him. I looked around and saw noone so I waved him closer to me, back towards the dressing rooms. I stood outside my stall, turned around and showed off the dress. He started gushing fabulous compliments to me, which really inspired me to go through with this".

"So I went back into the dressing room and tried on the second dress, a real sexy one with very thin, body hugging material. I openned the dressing room door and asked if anyone else was out there. He said no. So I walked back out and turned around and showed myself off again. I knew I had him. His face told me how good I looked. So I walked back towards my dressing room and called him over."

I turned around, showing off my ass, and asked him if my panties were showing through. He looked left, then right then down at my ass. He told me that he could see my panty lines. I was wearing regular panties so I turned towards him and asked if I should wear a thong or just go pantyless."

"His face was so red and I could see his hardon pushing his pants. I asked him again if anyone was out there and he said no so I pulled him into the dressing room with me. Hiking up my dress, I pulled my panties down and stepped out of them. Whispering, I asked if the dress looked better without the panties, then turned around and showed myself off again"

"I know I was supposed to expose myself in bra and panties but I couldn't figure out how to do it so I had to improvise. I bent forward, pushing my ass into his crotch. I asked him if I should try on the other dress. He could barely say yes"

"So I pulled the dress up and over my head, standing there totally nude. I knew I went to far. I probably shouldn't have done this dare at all, but I had gone this far and was so turned on I couldn't control myself. I reached out and touched him"

I was completely turned on up to this point but now felt very weird because she 'touched' him. I wanted her to stop the story right there but wanted to hear more at the same time. I promised not to get mad and asked her to tell me everything.

"I touched him, through his pants. He was hard for me and I loved it. I thought of you and how much you'd get turned on when I told you that I got turned on right there. So I undid his belt."

"I undid his belt and undid his pants and pulled them down to his knees. He was rock hard right there in the dressing room and I wasn't wearing a thing. I had my hand on it, rubbing it, feeling his balls. Then he asked if I wanted to kiss it"

I couldn't believe what I was hearing. This was my girlfriend and she was telling me that she was naked in a dressing room jerking a guy off and about to give him a blow job! I was angry and humiliated but also really turned on.

Before I could say anything else, she started talking again, telling me how she sat her bare ass down on the bench in the dressing room and sucked his dick right there.

"I didn't pull him out like I do with you, either," she confessed. "I knew he was getting ready to come and I kept sucking him until he came, right there in my mouth. When he was finished, he pulled back and pulled up his pants. He looked down at his watch and told me he had to get back to work but that I could track him down whenever I needed to try on some more clothes"

"I stayed there, naked in the dressing room for a while, thinking about what I did. I was so ashamed at first but then realized that you instigated this. You instigated all of this. So, in a way, its your fault that I gave head to someone else".

I guess she was right.

 

[Ravlicious]

Nice story. Very well written.

How come nothing like that ever happened to me when I worked in retail? I guess I should have gotten a job in a clothing store. hehe.

 

[SweetErika]

FYI, a lot of members aren't comfortable e-mailing someone they don't know, particularly if that person doesn't have much of a history on the boards. E-mail addresses are private info, and most of us don't give them out willy-nilly. There's no reason to email when I can reply to the threads or communicate via PM if it's a private topic.

I think it'd be great if you:

- Added more description/details (e.g. What does she and the salesman look like? Describe her lingerie. How did she feel physically and mentally during the act? More on the narrator's feelings as she was telling the story, etc., etc.) to really bring it to life and increase the interest and arousal factors. Paint a picture for the readers!

- Added activity to/after this paragraph: "I stayed there, naked in the dressing room for a while, thinking about what I did. I was so ashamed at first but then realized that you instigated this. You instigated all of this. So, in a way, its your fault that I gave head to someone else". For example, she could masturbate, stop at an erotic lingerie/toy store and buy a toy to use with the narrator later, but then end up using it in the car/ before he got home (many people identify with uncontrollable urges, and find that idea very appealing), or simply fantasize about what she would do with him or how she'd get off later (be sure to describe thoughts in great detail).

- Filled out the ending. I was left thinking, 'So...? What happened next? How did he feel? What did they do (talk, have sex, plan to do similar in the future, etc.)?

- Fixed the errors, mainly with punctuating dialogue. There are tons of great resources here and elsewhere on the subject, and it shouldn't be hard to fix. Look for the rules on ending punctuation, multi-paragraph narratives and using commas correctly.