New story, seeking feedback.

[bignfirm]

Hey all, just wrote a new story for the first time in a while and curious for any thoughts. Always much appreciated!

https://classic.literotica.com/s/a-peek-then-a-poke

 

[DegenerateReader]

I looked over the story. Personally, I'm not a big fan of of the kind of first-person conversation writing style you went with, and I wasn't able to finish the story, so I'm probably the wrong person to give you a review of this. But a little thing I noticed:

"Yeah, I've had to deal with everyone's looks my whole life. I've always been tiny obviously but now in my early 20's, people do more of a double take when they see me in a professional setting.

You forgot the ending quote. Also I don't think someone who recently entered their 20s would refer to it as "my early 20s," that sounds like something someone older than that would say. "Now that I'm in my 20s" - when you're a teen an turn 20, 21, 22 etc, you don't think of it as your early 20s, you think of it as being an adult now.