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[LIDiver]

https://literotica.com/s/torys-emergence

Hi everyone.
I posted a story about my wife’s crazy night out called Tory’s Emergence.
It got trashed by the anonymous trolls before we could react. We are wondering what real Lit Readers would think of it.
Please give it a read.
We thank you!

 

[yukonnights]

I just finished your first story and IMO it is especially well crafted for a first effort. It had a fresh theme/plot that touched on those marriages that do enjoy a bit of variety in the bedroom, was nicely edited with only a minor typo or two and it put an approving light on the swinger lifestyle. That such marriages and encounters do really happen in real life is an irrefutable fact, the story supports the reality that these kind of marriages do exist and are quite normal human behavior.

You're braver than me for putting it in the LW category. Like you, my first ever story was in LW and it languished for so many years there that I did a redo by making it a three-part series of stories in another category. For what it's worth, it was like a refreshing breeze blew my way once I was out of the LW game. Hope you have a long and enjoyable time here!

 

[Smuttyandfun]

Just read your story and left a comment. I thought it was really written, especially for a first submission. Only spotted one or two small mistakes, mostly with tenses. I'm looking forward to reading more from you, and hope you have another story on the way.

 

[LIDiver]

Wow, thank you friends for the encouraging words.
Yes, i’ve come to realize that there are disturbed lurkers in the LW realm that should cast a look at themselves before they cruelly judge others.
Please do us a favor and point out where the typos and grammatical errors lie. I’d like to tighten up the story.
I thank you.

 

[Imstillfun]

Do not concern yourself with LW trolls. Write what you love. Your writing style is good and your story was fun.

I have over 8000 followers and more than my share of trolls. They hate wifesharing stories, but they read every one of them, then complain.

me thinks they protest too much.

 

[LIDiver]

The attempt and not the deeds confounds us.

I thank you, Your Still Fun!

 

[SimonDoom]

Do not concern yourself with LW trolls. Write what you love. Your writing style is good and your story was fun.

I have over 8000 followers and more than my share of trolls. They hate wifesharing stories, but they read every one of them, then complain.

me thinks they protest too much.

I like your attitude. I think it's refreshing, and it needs to be said to let others know that there's another way of thinking.

As you say, you have 8000 followers. Gazillions of people read and enjoy your hot wife stories. Who gives a f$#% what the scores are or how many drooling trolls you get? You have the choice to ignore the trolls and enjoy the fans: isn't that the right choice?

Too many authors--and I guess it's just human nature--are too focused on negative feedback and not focused enough on positive feedback. Isn't it better to get 20 good comments/votes and 5 bad comments/votes than 10 good comments/votes and no bad comments/votes? You are reaching more people who like your story.

 

[LIDiver]

I like your attitude. I think it's refreshing, and it needs to be said to let others know that there's another way of thinking.

As you say, you have 8000 followers. Gazillions of people read and enjoy your hot wife stories. Who gives a f$#% what the scores are or how many drooling trolls you get? You have the choice to ignore the trolls and enjoy the fans: isn't that the right choice?

Too many authors--and I guess it's just human nature--are too focused on negative feedback and not focused enough on positive feedback. Isn't it better to get 20 good comments/votes and 5 bad comments/votes than 10 good comments/votes and no bad comments/votes? You are reaching more people who like your story.

Well said, sir, well said.

 

[yowser]

I'll echo the others: nicely written, clever, different, the perfect sort of hotwife story that unfortunately gets unfairly trashed in LW.

I'll send more detailed commentary privately, and not clutter up this thread, but I think the best thing you could do is get yourself a copy of a style guide, Strunk and White's 'Elements of Style' or the 'Chicago Manual of Style.' Your mechanics, including verb tense and punctuation, are way above Lit norms, but could still use a lot of work. Even if you don't go the style guide route, just making everything consistent (using quotes and commas the same way throughout) would be sufficient, but you wander all over the place. If you get the basic rules down, that will eliminate 80 percent of your issues.

Sweet story, pray continue...

 

[Twanquavius]

I read it. Great story! Gave it 5 stars. I wish there was a way to ban one-star trolls before they could have touched your story.

 

[Rob_Royale]

Very well done. I enjoyed it.

 

[LIDiver]

I read it. Great story! Gave it 5 stars. I wish there was a way to ban one-star trolls before they could have touched your story.

I do so very much appreciate it!

 

[LIDiver]

I read it. Great story! Gave it 5 stars. I wish there was a way to ban one-star trolls before they could have touched your story.

We thank you!
I’ve learned to live with the trolls and find much joy in deleting their pathetic little comments. Very satisfying!

 

[LIDiver]

Very well done. I enjoyed it.

So much thanks!
Your appreciation cancels out many trolls.
Cheers!

 

[lc69hunter]

Just read it, enjoyed it and gave it a 5. The little men trolls have no concept of something like this

 

[SimpleEnigma]

Do not concern yourself with LW trolls. Write what you love. Y

This.

At the end of the figurative day, all that matters is that you've made yourself and others around you happy. Don't let the assholes win.

Your tale is hot and engaging. I remember when Lauren and I read it together. It sparked quite an evening. So, from a personal perspective, well the fuck done!

 

[Imstillfun]

https://literotica.com/s/torys-emergence

Hi everyone.
I posted a story about my wife’s crazy night out called Tory’s Emergence.
It got trashed by the anonymous trolls before we could react. We are wondering what real Lit Readers would think of it.
Please give it a read.
We thank you!

This is not just a good first story, this was a great story, not a great first story, just a great story. Do not let the trolls get you down. I have so many trolls I can’t keep count. Look at it this way.

The trolls are fans. They read your entire work. Then felt something from what you wrote. So much that they had to respond. you’d think they’d avoid your future works, but they won’t. They’ll keep coming back for that feeling. Embrace them. PMing you more.

 

[saintcero]

That was a fun read. It was something I could relate to and could easily project myself into the story line. I bet Mark has those panties framed and mounted somewhere.

 

[Vintage_DM]

I read it. Great story! Gave it 5 stars. I wish there was a way to ban one-star trolls before they could have touched your story.

Agree with you totally. I wish the trolls would go back under the bridge and hide there. Does anyone wanta to take this bet? Trolls have never posted here and gotten a solid score?

 

[LIDiver]

Appreciation for the encouraging words!
I’ve finally started on relating what happened the next morning. Here’s a teaser first line:

Through a clouded waking daze, my outstretched searching hand found nothing beside me but cool sheet and blanket, confirming what I already knew, she had not returned to our marital bed.

Next chapter to:
https://literotica.com/s/torys-emergence

 

[RoperTrace]

Excellent story! The suspense was killing me, well, you know what I mean. Five stars, and a super start on LIT. Congratulations. RT

 

[SexyInMy60s]

https://literotica.com/s/torys-emergence

Hi everyone.
I posted a story about my wife’s crazy night out called Tory’s Emergence.
It got trashed by the anonymous trolls before we could react. We are wondering what real Lit Readers would think of it.
Please give it a read.
We thank you!

Very good and thoroughly unconventional. Great storytelling and classic bit of “callback” with the question he keeps asking her. A few clunky bits here and there. Think about letting fewer words tell the same story. But for the love of god please keep writing.