New Poems

[Amative_Prince]

Hi All,

My first two submissions have just hit the site. It's been a while since I've allowed my work to be seen by the public; I'm hoping that I've retained my chops.

The first poem is "Passionate Rejoice". Two lovers experience an emotional reconciliation.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=309041

The second is "Delicate Rain". It's just pure lust.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=309037

Would you be so kind as to let me know what you think?

Thank you,

AP

 

[CeriseNoire]

For the moment, I chose to read your second poem. I enjoyed the overall mood of the poem, but some of the metaphors slightly miss the mark IMHO.

Also, you may want to post this in the Poetry Feedback Forum, where you'll find accomplished poets to give you a more in-depth critique than I can.

 

[Amative_Prince]

Wrong forum -- how embarrassing.

Thanks for the feedback.