New Poem!!!

[Debbie]

A Fantasy for him

Let me know what you think

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=23661

 

[Oasis690]

Great Poem, Debbie! Very Hot! Easy to visualize...
You are a sexpot, no?

Nothing wrong with that!!

 

[White Crane]

He's very lucky

I read this poem and a few of your others. I feel passion, sensuality, and urgency in your poetry. But, you seem to want to rhyme everything, and I find this actually distracts me from the emotions flowing from your words. Either that or the rhythm/rhyming almost, but don't quite flow.

Your poetry reminds me a lot of Paul Simon's. One poem/song that particularly comes to mind is "A Poem on the Underground Wall". I've included a link to it so you can see what I mean:

http://www.angelfire.com/music/sandglyrics/parsley.htm#track11