new incest story
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It'd be nice if you posted a link to your story so we could read it.
Meanwhile, could you answer me a question?
Why do there seem to be lots of incest stories (mostly mother/son) written by people from the Indian subcontinent? There seem to be more of that type than any other kind, why is that? Is it a cultural things perhaps?
I'd like to hear your, or anyone elses, views.
J-J
Meanwhile, could you answer me a question?
Why do there seem to be lots of incest stories (mostly mother/son) written by people from the Indian subcontinent? There seem to be more of that type than any other kind, why is that? Is it a cultural things perhaps?
I'd like to hear your, or anyone elses, views.
J-J
Indian Incest!
For some strange reason my bride does not like Indian Incest stories because it gives her the willies.
I find this strange but she has no problem with African Americans or what ever we call them today. They are forever changing what they call themselves, as far as l'm concerned they are just plain Americans period.
Alan
For some strange reason my bride does not like Indian Incest stories because it gives her the willies.
I find this strange but she has no problem with African Americans or what ever we call them today. They are forever changing what they call themselves, as far as l'm concerned they are just plain Americans period.
Alan
Indian Incest
I have also noticed a disproportionte number of incest stories in "Indian" genre. I have thought it might be that Indian families are very protective of their teens, not giving them opportunities for "outside" romances.
Any other ideas?
I have also noticed a disproportionte number of incest stories in "Indian" genre. I have thought it might be that Indian families are very protective of their teens, not giving them opportunities for "outside" romances.
Any other ideas?
MagicFingers
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Re: story approved
I'm not going to go search for it without a really good reason, so help us out here if you want feedback.
Either in your post or signature, you need to supply a link to your work!
Thanks.
No feedback without some kind of link somewhere.chan69 said:
I'm not going to go search for it without a really good reason, so help us out here if you want feedback.
Either in your post or signature, you need to supply a link to your work!
Thanks.
link to my story
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=151458
this is the link to my story!!
waiting for your feedback guys!
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=151458
this is the link to my story!!
waiting for your feedback guys!
stray_girl
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Re: link to my story
I understand that English is not your first language, and that I could never even to hope to write anything comprehensible in my non-native language, or in my native English for the matter. This was obvious in your writing and I found it very distracting.
The plot was interesting, guy stays with female cousin while husband is away, then cousins have sex. For me, in an incest story, the moment that the related characters interact in a sexual manner should be the climax (no pun intended) of the narrative. Here's how yours went:
"Liar! You have been watching me for quite some time while I was bathing!" she said mischievously and added, "How do you find me?"
"Oh! You are great." I gathered some courage and asked, "Now that you know, can I see you naked?"
She thought for a moment and said, "Well, you can but you will have to remove your clothes too, so that I will not feel shy."
Not only is your female character getting naked in front of her cousin, but she is also about to cheat on her husband. Your depiction is uninteresting and not even very erotic. I would have liked to see a little more inner conflict in the main characters, especially the female. Your female character just had a baby and you could have used in this fact in your story to great effect, but you ignored it. Just after childbirth women often feel unattractive. You could have used the idea of the woman feeling rejected by her husband as a stronger motivation to stray from him.
One last thing. I love reading stories involving other cultures. I would have liked to see a depiction of the values your characters find important. I don't know much about Indian culture, but I suspect that incest and adultery is taboo. I felt not sense of taboo or danger in your story, which, I think, is what makes people like the incest genre.
You have the making of a good story, it just needs some refinement.
kisses,
Genna
chan69 said:
I understand that English is not your first language, and that I could never even to hope to write anything comprehensible in my non-native language, or in my native English for the matter. This was obvious in your writing and I found it very distracting.
The plot was interesting, guy stays with female cousin while husband is away, then cousins have sex. For me, in an incest story, the moment that the related characters interact in a sexual manner should be the climax (no pun intended) of the narrative. Here's how yours went:
"Liar! You have been watching me for quite some time while I was bathing!" she said mischievously and added, "How do you find me?"
"Oh! You are great." I gathered some courage and asked, "Now that you know, can I see you naked?"
She thought for a moment and said, "Well, you can but you will have to remove your clothes too, so that I will not feel shy."
Not only is your female character getting naked in front of her cousin, but she is also about to cheat on her husband. Your depiction is uninteresting and not even very erotic. I would have liked to see a little more inner conflict in the main characters, especially the female. Your female character just had a baby and you could have used in this fact in your story to great effect, but you ignored it. Just after childbirth women often feel unattractive. You could have used the idea of the woman feeling rejected by her husband as a stronger motivation to stray from him.
One last thing. I love reading stories involving other cultures. I would have liked to see a depiction of the values your characters find important. I don't know much about Indian culture, but I suspect that incest and adultery is taboo. I felt not sense of taboo or danger in your story, which, I think, is what makes people like the incest genre.
You have the making of a good story, it just needs some refinement.
kisses,
Genna
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