New Chapter~ Feast or Famine? part 5

athena_by_night

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Hello All Ye Lit Devotees~

I would sincerely love feedback on my latest effort...so please... compose your thoughts and post for me to read. I only wish to improve upon my writing to this point.

Thank You!
 
You are really a great writer, you know? You used language in this story that suggested the very era you're writing about. I really like that. I also was completely engrossed the entire way through it. I couldn't put it down until the last word, and then I was heartsick that it was over.

I loved the way that Luka had found himself taken with Marianna and the changes he went through as she was taking a bath. The poor guy. OMG!! And the fight scene is fantastic. what was added made it so real and I was trembling, worried that the two were gonna rip each other apart. What an awesome story, Marie. Kudos, count coup, and points to you.

Please continue this story. I have to know what happens between Luka and Stephanos. You are dragging this thing out so deliciously. I love it!! and the anticipation is about to drive me nuts. lol. Great work, Marie......Honest!!!!!!!!
 
My adorable Eric~

You are one of the most wonderful people I know on this planet. I love all your comments and your thoughtfulness in them. And I am so glad you are enjoying yourself with my story. All of you have certainly added to it in one way or another and my writing springs from some of your ideas. I hope I keep you riveted on the edge of your seat throughout it. I am working on the next chapter now..

Marie
 
athena_by_night said:
My adorable Eric~

You are one of the most wonderful people I know on this planet. I love all your comments and your thoughtfulness in them. And I am so glad you are enjoying yourself with my story. All of you have certainly added to it in one way or another and my writing springs from some of your ideas. I hope I keep you riveted on the edge of your seat throughout it. I am working on the next chapter now..

Marie

He is one of the sweetest most lovable guys I know, Marie. You would be surprised at how thoughtful he is. And we all love him dearly.

Your vampire story is really taking shape. I am so very much enjoying it. It's not only good, it's excellent. The intrigue and mystery behind Luka and Stephanos is insanely driving us to wishing the rest of the story would come now. Lol. Such a suspence filled mystery you have here. To have Luka kidnap Marianna was ingenius. Because now you have a riveting mystery, instead of just a simple one. And it seems that at every turn of the page, we are met with some new angle to the story.

Do I see print in your future here? Hmmm.......
 
Thank you so much my friend~

You fill my heart with joy with your words. I write for myself and for all of you, but I hope to continue improving upon it because I think you are such an amazing writer. I want to keep working at it so that it will rise a little bit towards the level of your talent. I say that with truth for I see you as the far greater writer and who better to aspire to?

Thank you my dear sweet Billy...for everything!

Marie
 
athena_by_night said:
Thank you so much my friend~

You fill my heart with joy with your words. I write for myself and for all of you, but I hope to continue improving upon it because I think you are such an amazing writer. I want to keep working at it so that it will rise a little bit towards the level of your talent. I say that with truth for I see you as the far greater writer and who better to aspire to?

Thank you my dear sweet Billy...for everything!

Marie

Marie, you make me feel ashamed, now. And I know you don't mean to. I am just so heartsick at the moment that writing is far from me. The passing of my father last month and now the very man I wrote about in Bigrig being killed more than a week ago, is just more than I can bear right now, in even lifting a finger to type one word. I have tried in vain. And as theroputic as it should be, I just can't seem to get out of the depression I'm in. Please forgive me. I will keep trying. I do it everyday I am alive. I just need some time.

James Bowman may have been the worse man on the face of the earth to so many, even to me. But I was in love with him at one time. And to a point I still did love him. Maybe not a deep as I once had when I was much younger, dumber and blind to his ways. But the truth still holds true that I loved him. Everyone can criticise me all they wish. I don't give a 'f', right now. The man was human and I was his pet, his playtoy. And I loved him. I will not apologize for it either. I learned my lessons from the circumstances that came. I grew from the experience. And I have so much to thank him for. I now have experiences that I can share and help others with. How can that be so wrong?
 
Time, patience and love are what I can offer to you, Billy. I know you hurt and I know you struggle with that. You are supposed to. If you just shrugged it off, I would be worried.

As you move through your journey with this, remember the good things and people you have in your life now that can help you deal with all of your thoughts, feelings and emotions. We are there for you.

Always. Marie
 
athena_by_night said:
Time, patience and love are what I can offer to you, Billy. I know you hurt and I know you struggle with that. You are supposed to. If you just shrugged it off, I would be worried.

As you move through your journey with this, remember the good things and people you have in your life now that can help you deal with all of your thoughts, feelings and emotions. We are there for you.

Always. Marie

Very well said, Marie.
 
athena_by_night said:
My adorable Eric~

You are one of the most wonderful people I know on this planet. I love all your comments and your thoughtfulness in them. And I am so glad you are enjoying yourself with my story. All of you have certainly added to it in one way or another and my writing springs from some of your ideas. I hope I keep you riveted on the edge of your seat throughout it. I am working on the next chapter now..

Marie

He is adorable, Marie. A most gentle man with such a thoughtful personality. And very humorous. He'll make you laugh at the drop of a hat. And he's very cute at that. Lol.
 
athena_by_night said:
Hello All Ye Lit Devotees~

I would sincerely love feedback on my latest effort...so please... compose your thoughts and post for me to read. I only wish to improve upon my writing to this point.

Thank You!

Very good story, girl. Excellent thriller in the making. Just waiting to see what is about to happen next.
 
windstormy said:
He is one of the sweetest most lovable guys I know, Marie. You would be surprised at how thoughtful he is. And we all love him dearly.

I totally agree. He is a very loving and thoughtful man, as Billy has said. I would not want to ever miss having met him. He is very precious.
 
athena_by_night said:
Hello All Ye Lit Devotees~

I would sincerely love feedback on my latest effort...so please... compose your thoughts and post for me to read. I only wish to improve upon my writing to this point.

Thank You!

Love your vampire story, Marie. Can't get enough of it. And can't wait to read the next chapter. It is so very good and getting better with each chapter. I just hope it never ends.
 
Thank you all....very much.... I will do my best to live up to expectations with regards to this story.

Jules...Eric's got to be cute as a button!

Doug...thank you for the 'well said'

ok... I condensed... sue me! lol
 
athena_by_night said:
Thank you all....very much.... I will do my best to live up to expectations with regards to this story.

Jules...Eric's got to be cute as a button!

Doug...thank you for the 'well said'

ok... I condensed... sue me! lol

Huney, aint nuttin wrong with you condensing. You got your experience. It's the rest of us that's tagged as virgins around here. hehehe. But I really could say something about that. I'll be nice though. Lol.

Oh, and if you were to ever see Eric, you'd fall in love. He is a looker, huney.....
 
New Chapter ~ Feast or Famine? part 5

Welllllllllll........ Huney.......... you are just a peach! And you say what you like about virgins...lol..... welcome aboard Dale...take a seat...sip a drink....have some fun.....oh....and chapter 6 is out! lol.... y'all know what to do! Front and Center!

lol...love you... Marie

ps. you all are lookers! ;) :nana:
 
New Chapter ~ Feast or Famine? part 5

oooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh making some progress! Got a dancing nanna........lmao!

Marie!
 
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