New Author

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Hi to all the authors and literotica members out there! I am new to this site, and I think it is awesome! I am enjoying alot of the written talents in here. Thank-you.
The Cabin and The Fantasy, are just newly submitted this past week. I hope all my reader's enjoy them as well. I am new to writing, The Fantasy being my first story and The Cabin my second. I hope to have a third one out soon. I must say, writing Erotica is quite the challenge, but it is most enjoyable. If anyone cares to contact me, I can be reached by email posted with my stories. Thanks Katerina

[This message has been edited by katerina (edited 03-01-2000).]

 

[PHANTOM5875]

katerina, just a short note to compliment you for your erotic romance story, "The Cabin". I have not been typically drawn to this particular genre but after reading your two stories, "The Fantasy" and "The Cabin", you may have made a convert. I absolutely LOVE the way you *paint* with words and create the setting and build the suspense. Can't wait for your next story, "Dezerae remembers"

PHANTOM

 

[HotGirl]

Hi katerina. I read your stories. They weren't terrible, but they were a little too flowery in the prose. Your phrases were kinda trite, like "her full luscious breasts", "a yearning deep inside her cried out for more", "Ante in his naked splendor". It read too much like a romance novel and not enough like real a story, but maybe that's what you were going for, I don't know. I like stories where I get to know the characters, and in your stories they're one-dimensional, like cable-TV sex couples. That's just my opinion, anyway, and since you asked for feedback I thought I'd tell you.

 

[HotGirl]

Another thing: "Lost within their embrace the cabin went unnoticed." This sounds like the cabin was lost in their embrace. There are a few sentences like this where you kind of know what you're trying to say, but they don't logically make sense. A grammar checker might be helpful. I know Word has a very good one in it. Just trying to help!

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Hotgirl, thanks for your constructive critisim. It's always good to have certain things pointed out. I will have to get Laurel to put a comma after Lost with their embrace, as I forgot to put one in. And yes you are right, it sounds like the cabin is lost without that comma. Thanks for pointing that out to me. As for my writing style, well I just started writing, and that is just what came out! I had no idea what kind of style I would have, or if it would be good or not. I guess people that like the harder core type stories would hate my style of writing, but hey everyone has different tastes that's for sure. I have just learned that some of my writings have been published for real...$ coming my way, so I guess someone out there likes the more flowery prose type story. I would appreaciate it, if there are any other confusing sentences, that you would like to point out to me, as I have read it so many times in my editing, that I have obviously overlooked some things. I guess that can happen with all writers though. Thanks Hotgirl Katerina

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Phantom5875, Thanks so much for your great comments. They are very much appreaciated. I do hope you enjoy my new story as well. Yes I have noticed that my writing is abit more hmmm... like a romance novel I guess, but everyone does like different types of story lines. I am still learning here, and I will have to see if I can up up with a more real story, just takes practice I suppose. Back to the old drawing board! hehehe.... It's always fun to write though, no matter what you come up with...Talk to you soon Katerina

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Hotgirl, I will definately use a grammer check in the future, thanks Kat

 

[*Eve*]

I liked your stories. I thought they were well written. There were only a few little things here and there as hotgirl pointed out but I know as you write more you will get better. You are very talented, and I hope to read more of your stories in the future.

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

I mentioned on my other posting above, that I had learned one of my stories sold. I have just found out, not one but two of them sold. Both The Cabin and Dezerae Remembers. A Company called (Red Shoe Productions) is the interested party. They want (both Movie and Book, or Magazine rights.) There is still alot I need to learn regarding this sale, and if anyone out there has any valuble information they would like to share with me, I would appreacitate it. Hehehe I guess they like my flowery prose....Thanks Katerina

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Eve, thanks so much for your feedback, I really appreciate it. Thanks to hotgirl too, for making me see some of my mistakes. I have fixed them now, and will send revivsed copy to Laurel at a later date. I don't know if I caught them all, but I gave it my best shot. I am learning all the time, especially through the feedback and suggestions of other authors. Thanks Katerina

 

[Butterfly]

Hey Katrina "Congrats to you on your stories" I thought they were great and you'll have to keep us posted on the sale and movie rights - just make sure before you sign anything you read the fine print and in between lines also. Good idea to have someone who you trust completely read contracts with you so you don't get screwed or stabbed in back. I'm really happy for you.

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Hi Butterfly, You can be sure I will be checking into things completely before signing anything. I still have alot to find out. This is all new to me here. Thanks for the tips, I will be sure to remember them. Also thanks for the great email, it was nice to hear from you. Hugs Katerina =) How do you get a smiley on here? Hint Hint Hint.....

 

[SpecialK]

Hey Katerina...

Try giving your smilies round eyeballs instead of long ones... ie: (These are round eyeballs --> : ) This is a wink ---> ; Then just add the smile.

You can also click on the UBB Code link at the bottom of this page and it will show you what else you can use to add features.

K

 

[PHANTOM5875]

Katerina, congratulations on the sale of your two stories! Doesn't surprise me in the least. Gosh! Didn't know I had such exquisite taste in stories and authors!

Wishing you continued success in your writings. Looking forward to reading Dezerae Remembers!

PHANTOM

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Thanks Special K for the tips, I will be sure to check out the options. Thanks also Phantom for your best wishes, but nothing is signed yet, so I will wait and see what happens here. I will definately keep you posted. Katerina

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

You can imagine my surprise when I saw my response, hehe I only used

instead of =) and I got

Thanks Special K, and it was that easy! Kat

 

[Wordmage]

Hi. Out of curiosity, do you know if Red Shoe Productions is the production company for Red Shoe Diaries? If so, you've *really* hit the big time! Congratulations on the sale.

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Yes, actually that was the company, but the sale unfortunately did not work out.

 

[Wordmage]

That's too bad...is your friend's agent willing to represent you? If so, consider it...if they were interested, you have a marketable talent.

 

[Gary1]

Congratulations Katerina ... well done ... It is a wonderful accomplishment to have a company want your work. The first ones are the best ...

 

[Whispersecret]

Katerina,
I thought your stories were above the norm for this site. Your descriptions were vivid and well-written. It was obvious these two were in love.

However, as well as you described their feelings for each other, I didn't really "feel" that myself. Maybe because I knew nothing about them other than their names, that they were at this cabin together, and they obviously loved each other. I humbly suggest you develop your characters a little. Tell us a little about who they are. What drives them? What made them the way they are? What are their faults and fears? To me they seemed a little like Stepford people. (Boy, am I dating myself, or what?)

Other than that, I felt your sentences flowed easily and you have an above-average vocabulary.

How do you pronounce Ante's name? Like the poker ante? Or "ahn-tay?" Just curious. Also, thanks for choosing interesting names. I'm so tired of Lisa and Debbie and the other ones that have been over-used, but which I can't remember right now.

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Hey gary1, thanks so much for thinking of me. I do not deserve congratulations though, as my stories never sold. I have explained why in my new posting, A Valuable Lesson, if you care to read it. Someday, I do hope to experience what being published feels like. If not, well thats ok too, because I only write because it gives me such satisfaction. Thanks again, Katerina

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Thank-you whispersecret for your praise on my writing skills. I pay strict attention to my volcabulary, always trying to learn more. My Dictionary is close by when I write, I would be lost without it.

Above the norm? Wow, being a new writer, I take that as a very high compliment. Thanks so much.

I will definately try to develop my characters abit better in any upcoming stories. Thank-you for your advice and pointing that out to me.

Ante...is pronouced like Ant-ee. A long e sound at the end. Glad you like the names. I kinda like them myself. Katerina

[This message has been edited by katerina (edited 03-01-2000).]