New author, new story

[adoka]

My first story submitted
Hello everyone,

Long time reader first time writer. I submitted a story titled Rent money. http://www.literotica.com/stories/s...y.php?id=100472 I would appreciate any feedback that would help me improve my writing or just to let me know what you think of the story. I plan to submit much more in the future.

Thanks
Adoka.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=100472

 

[ScottyBoy900Q]

My first story submitted
Hello everyone,

Long time reader first time writer. I submitted a story titled Rent money. http://www.literotica.com/stories/s...y.php?id=100472 I would appreciate any feedback that would help me improve my writing or just to let me know what you think of the story. I plan to submit much more in the future.

Thanks
Adoka.

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[adoka]

taken care of

I fixed the link