New Author looking for an Editor

[sxcascinn]

Hi
I have just posted a poem on lit as a way to get my feet wet.
Unedited however as I have been having some problems getting one who isn't busy. And now subsequently there is a word that I want to change in a line I have never been happy with lol
I have two chapters of a story I am writing ready to be edited. The first chapter is more romance and the second is more erotic couplings.
And I am currently working on the third but having a bit of a block atm lol.
I have several stories on the go at one time and a couple finished that need expanding before I think about posting.
Basically I am looking for someone to help with grammar, punctuation and the overall flow of my story. Pointing out glaring inconsistencies and such.
Hugs all thx for taking the time to read this

 

[sxcascinn]

Ok so no response
I thought maybe I would add an excerpt or two so you can see some of what I have written.
This is from the end of the first chapter and carrying on through to the second chapter.

My letter goes something like this…..

I think about you all the time. I wonder how it would feel to have your hands on my body, how you would react to the feel of my hands on yours. I dream about you all the time…

I dream about you cupping my cheek in the palm of your hand, caressing softly before sliding your hand around to the nape of my neck and tugging me gently closer.

I dream about the feel of your lips as you ever so lightly touch them to my forehead my eyes, my nose. I want so much to feel your lips on mine. Can you feel the want, the need radiating from me?

That is as far as I got before I fell asleep to dream dreams of you.

I sigh, a gentle sigh as you place your lips to mine. My lips part, as you tease my mouth with your lips, your tongue. Even the feel of your breath mingling with mine excites me. I dream you kiss me slowly deeply thoroughly, exploring my mouth with your tongue as you go.

I dream I slide my hands up your bank and wind my fingers through your hair. How does it feel when I do that? I urge you to deepen the kiss, pulling your head closer to mine. I want to feel your tongue deeper in my mouth, your lips a little firmer on mine. Does it turn you on to know I want more? Do you want more? I wonder are you thinking of stopping or are you going to continue this to a glorious conclusion? Do you want, need, ache for fulfillment as much as I do? If we stopped would it be agony for you too?

In my dream I can feel a wildfire spreading through my body. I can feel the flames of the rapidly growing inferno reaching out, licking at my most sacred and sensitive places, crying out to be quenched.

I wonder if there is a fire building in you as well. I wonder if this is a dream at all. It feels so real. It couldn’t possibly be another fleeting dream

Thx for taking a look
If you think you could help me please let me know

 

[LadyCibelle]

Hi,

I understand your sense of urgency in wanting someone to look at your story and I'm sorry to say I'm not here to offer my services. My plate is overflowing etc... and all the other excuses you might expect.

What I want you to know is that for lots of us, VE, it's Summertime, just like for you, which means longer response times, less time to edit because we are with our family more etc, etc, etc...

If it's any consolation to you, you're not alone in that boat. Plenty of writers are waiting for someone to look at their story and edit it.

 

[CopyCarver]

Ordinarily, I'd offer to help but I'm so swamped with 9-to-5 editing that I'm bringing it home from my office. If you haven't found an editor by the end of the week, give me a shout.

 

[sxcascinn]

Ordinarily, I'd offer to help but I'm so swamped with 9-to-5 editing that I'm bringing it home from my office. If you haven't found an editor by the end of the week, give me a shout.

Thx

 

[snooper]

... What I want you to know is that for lots of us, VE, it's Summertime, just like for you, ...

Er ... since sxcascinn is in Australia it's WINTER there.

 

[LadyCibelle]

Er ... since sxcascinn is in Australia it's WINTER there.

Thanks Snooper, I didn't know. But anyway, for most people it's Summer and that's what I meant, that we have less time because of it.

 

[sxcascinn]

Thats Ok Is all Good I will get there in the end I am sure. I have gotten this far lol

 

[LadyCibelle]

Thats Ok Is all Good I will get there in the end I am sure. I have gotten this far lol

that's the spirit

 

[bluebell]

How's the search going, Cinny?

(That will be my unofficial nickname for you until you tell me you hate it or else beat me over the head with a frighteningly long loaf of French bread. In which case I could lose all consciousness and never awake to call you anything ever again...)

 

[sxcascinn]

How's the search going, Cinny?

(That will be my unofficial nickname for you until you tell me you hate it or else beat me over the head with a frighteningly long loaf of French bread. In which case I could lose all consciousness and never awake to call you anything ever again...)

Had a few offers couple I take seriously a few I don't....
But is a bad week now sigh. Would have been my sons 5th birthday on Thursday, is my daughters 4th on Tuesday. Kids go back to school in a week. Then I can get back to work I guess. Miss 11 gets to stay up an extra hour so I lose my Lit time.lol.
Thx Everyone

 

[bluebell]

Had a few offers couple I take seriously a few I don't....
But is a bad week now sigh. Would have been my sons 5th birthday on Thursday, is my daughters 4th on Tuesday. Kids go back to school in a week. Then I can get back to work I guess. Miss 11 gets to stay up an extra hour so I lose my Lit time.lol.
Thx Everyone

 

[Toa_lin]

If you're still looking for one ever, let me know, as an insomniac, I generally have space for "1 more project" (A.K.A. send me anything you want to )

If you don't ask for my assistance, no offense will be taken, i understand completely. Either way, good luck, I hope all you seek to get out of this will come true, and hopefully more good then you expected.