New and first post

[TheFrenchGuy]

Hi everyone and Happy New Year !

I recently posted "Soleyn" my first story on the site. More will be posted soon.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=121123

I'd love to have your comments and/or appreciations about it.

Thanks in advance.

TheFrenchGuy


"It's a luscious invention for three, summer by the sea" (Steely Dan)

 

[McKenna]

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[TheFrenchGuy]

Wow... I never expected such a complete analysis...
Thank you anyway for the time you took reading the story and commenting. And for the appreciation as well.

I must admit I should have taken a closer look before posting. The translation lacks precision (not to mention the 'et' here and there...). It was originaly written in french and in the urge to post, I may have hurried a bit too much.

As you have guessed, I am quite fluent with english (or so I consider myself) and I wrote many stories directly in english. Of course, not this one and it shows... but enough with self-pity !!

Most of your assumptions are correct but I can clear up things here and there :

"Depending on her moods, she would attract home men who had succeeded in seducing her." means that once a man succeded in seducing her (a difficult task in itself), she invited him to her home.

"And if she’s jealous of sharing me, she begs me again and again to tell her..." ... how I had sex with others, how I gave them pleasure. She got pretty excited this way...

"I want to get the bitch out of her" : true, it's a poor choice of words... "bring out the bitch in her" is correct.

"She hold back from coming..." : Ah !! I had a hard time with this one, and it seems my decision was not the best. The meaning her is "to keep from", "She doesn't want to"... The french verb is "se retenir". Any suggestion ?

"I mix the flesh..." : Okay, here's another translation problem. The french verb is "malaxer" and the idea is the hands play with her ass flesh like mixing some dough... It may not be a very erotic image, but it's the way it goes...


I will post my other stories soon (english and french) and some poems as well.

Thanks again

TheFrenchGuy

 

[McKenna]

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[MaxSebastian]

It's just a personal preference here, but "her rod urge" sounds odd to me. I would have used, "her urge for cock" or "her need for cock."

*Snigger*

He said "rod urge".

 

[phyremaire]

mmm i liked 'her Rod urge'

 

[TheFrenchGuy]

New post

Okay, my second post to the site is online.
Be warned that it's in french (no translation this time...).
Hope you like it anyway.

Follow the link and select "Natasha"...