Never written BDSM subjective story, but..

[geronimo_appleby]

could anyone give advice on where to go with a piece? I have an intro of sorts, where I've painted a character, potentially a really nasty piece of work, who needs developing. I am not into the scene at all, or rather, I've no experience of it but I want to write as decent a piece as I can.

Help!

I will show the intro to anyone who is willing to help out, hell I'll even put it straight up on here, it's only a couple of paragraphs. PM or replies on thread appreciated.

 

[CutieMouse]

I'd suggest starting with doing some reasearch in the BDSM Library; you will probably find a few ideas there.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

I'd suggest starting with doing some reasearch in the BDSM Library; you will probably find a few ideas there.

thanks cutie... and my what a cutie.

 

[myinnerslut]

in addition to the library.. try just lurking on the board and reading what people have to say about ther BBDSM..... or go to the stories section and read some BDSM stories

 

[geronimo_appleby]

here's the intro... subject to change of course, but the tone is there.

Her breasts got my attention. Not that I’m a ‘breast man’, per se, but my eyes were instantly drawn to them, and once my interest is aroused… well, that was her downfall. I knew from experience that Amanda, as I discovered her name to be, was damned, she was the quarry, unsuspecting, naive in her ignorance of the malignance that was barrelling towards her. I felt the surge in that undefined area, somewhere around the pit of my stomach, but connected in that odd way to my balls. Not an ache - nothing physical as such - more of a sensation, a deep, primal need. It had lain dormant for quite a time, but now it returned, and I knew we were lost… both of us were lost. Lost because we were both powerless to resist the coming, I’d tried to resist in the past but had always succumbed. This time I was anticipating the pleasure.

I watched Amanda all evening. I knew without asking that she had recently left a relationship. I knew she was vulnerable, I could sense it, and my instinct is unerring. The scent of her loneliness was strong. She wasn’t promiscuous or easy, but I could feel her craving for affection and I knew also that any man who paid her any attention that night would end up in her bed. It wasn’t the sex she wanted, it was the comfort, and I could taste her emotion.

‘Hello,’ I said simply when I judged the time was right. I’d seen another man taking an interest in Amanda which forced me to act or else risk losing sight of her. ‘Are you here alone?’

Amanda confirmed what I’d already known, she was alone, and she’d only come to the party to support her friend, Lorna who was the hostess. She wasn’t I the mood for parties really, having just split from her husband, etc, blah blah. I tuned out her mindless prattle and thought of my move.

 

[JMohegan]

My suggestion is that you send a PM to a guy named Pure.

Two reasons.

1 - I saw on the Main Lit Forums page that he is listed as moderator for Story Discussions, so he might have advice on how to get helpful feedback as you go.

2 - I think he is really going to like your male character.

 

[saw_man1]

I have read some of your stories and I know you don’t need any help with writing in general. You sir, are a very good writer

The knowledge you seek my young apprentice can only be gained in two ways.

1. Do it

2. Read about it

Doing it is a lot more fun.

 

[JMohegan]

The knowledge you seek my young apprentice can only be gained in two ways.

1. Do it

2. Read about it

Doing it is a lot more fun.

Generally speaking, I would agree.

However, if the story is a "really nasty" one involving a naive woman being taken advantage of by "malignance" in the form of an alleged dom, then I would hope the author will pick option 2.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

I have read some of your stories and I know you don’t need any help with writing in general. You sir, are a very good writer

The knowledge you seek my young apprentice can only be gained in two ways.

1. Do it

2. Read about it

Doing it is a lot more fun.

You little corrupter, you...