Never Alone

[~Dream~]

Never Alone

Never alone on the lonliest day
you're always there to show me the way
Wherever the darkness covers the light
I go to you ,your love shines bright

Although others may try to lead me astray
Aways with Your love my heart will stay
Never alone on the lonliest night
You're always there to make everything right

When day is done and shadows fall
your love sees me through ,
your voice is my call..

And soon I find any fears which have stirred
are near to be vanished with only a word

I pause a moment in surprise
then turn and gaze into your eyes
into my soul you put a spark
of purest hope that lights the dark

Within my heart you do abide
I can be myself , no need to hide
To reach my door ,you turned the key
i found love waiting there for me

Lonely people have heart's aching
No longer is my soft heart breaking
Bright as a blue sky ,light as a cloud
Joy is within me , I sing it aloud

 

[HomerPindar]

Never Alone

Never alone on the lonliest day
you're always there to show me the way
Wherever the darkness covers the light
I go to you ,your love shines bright

Although others may try to lead me astray
Aways with Your love my heart will stay
Never alone on the lonliest night
You're always there to make everything right

When day is done and shadows fall
your love sees me through ,
your voice is my call..

And soon I find any fears which have stirred
are near to be vanished with only a word

I pause a moment in surprise
then turn and gaze into your eyes
into my soul you put a spark
of purest hope that lights the dark

Within my heart you do abide
I can be myself , no need to hide
To reach my door ,you turned the key
i found love waiting there for me

Lonely people have heart's aching
No longer is my soft heart breaking
Bright as a blue sky ,light as a cloud
Joy is within me , I sing it aloud

hi Dream! how's it going?

Hope you don't mind, but I'm posting with a good wine buzz going, so I'm bound to post from instinct prior to full fledge thought first

With that in mind, the first thing that strikes me is the transition in the rhyning scheme (which worked for me) in the third and fourth stanza. The three line stanza:

When day is done and shadows fall
your love sees me through ,
your voice is my call..

has the two line rhyme, but it has that one line that stands out unrhymed, "When day is done and shadows fall," like it or not, this emphisis this line to me...

Coupled with the two line stanza:

And soon I find any fears which have stirred
are near to be vanished with only a word

which emphisis' the fear inherit in relationships... Together, this suggests that the focus of the relationship is in the dispelling of fear. the first stanza, with it's light/dark contrast helps to add to this theme, ie fear the dark, seek the light. and, the second stanza does this again, associating alone with night, and right with light (is this cliche? I cant tell right now )...

Yeah, all in all, I see a relationship between an element of fear/darkness/loneliness and comfort/light/relationship... As there is the possiblity of cliche with such a theme, you might want to emphisis the third/fourth stanza more. As they are already stressed by the change in the style, such an emphisis might help further punctuate the relationship..

Then again, it might have been a bit too much merlot

HomerPindar