I would be glad to go thru your story. I should note that I am a little harsh on bad grammer; but I do realize that nobody is perfect (present company excluded!) Try to run your story thru a spell checker -tho it wont get everything, but I'll fix what I can.
It is amazing to me how many errors get by; English is a bitch of a language when it comes to spelling. I try, you try, we all try; yet somewhere we will get something wrong.