Need some story help

[sethp]

So I'm almost finished a story but don't know how to end it.

Man goes under cover to infiltrate a gang and take them down.
At clubs initiation..he is forced to have sex with a whore...except it turns out to be his sister.
They have to go through with it or be killed.
Man goes to sisters house the next day to apologize and set things straight.
Sister pours her heart out that she loves him...despite his intentions they make love all night and he admits he's in love with her.
Next day man goes to his undercover apartment ..his mom sees him leaving his sisters house and follows him there. Three gang members go there to check on him.
After a series of unfortunate events...they are about to rape the mans mother..he intervenes. Telling them that she's his woman...he's forced to prove it or they both die.
He proves it, by shoving his cock in her mouth..she tastes another woman on his cock...putting two and two together...he admits that he was with his sister while he's fucking his mother....

Now...where do I go from here and how do I finish it and tie up the loose ends? It's actually got some really good dialogue and is much more romantic and believable then what I've laid out for you here.

Help ...the danger is that I'll end it too abruptly and unsatisfyingly.

 

[sr71plt]

Oh, go whole hog. His grandmother is the mob boss and has the hots for him. She catches him fucking his aunt and gets mad, shots her, rapes him, and then shots him too. His mother and sister sing a duet of "Amazing Grace" at the funeral, and the grandmother is pleased because her name is Grace and she assumes he has left a note praising her prowess in bed. Everything is running smoothly at the funeral until his daughter and cousin start disrupting everything by the daughter trying to climb in the coffin with him, claiming he's the father of her unborn child and a cousin rifling through the corpse's pockets once the daughter had the coffin open, claiming he owes her $25 for the roll in the hay the previous Saturday night.

 

[sethp]

It's not that crazy of a story! Lol I need a realistic ending. Lol

 

[SamScribble]

It's not that crazy of a story! Lol I need a realistic ending. Lol

I think maybe you should find some new people to hang out with. Otherwise, yeah, Pilot's idea sounds pretty ... well ... worth exploring anyway.

 

[sr71plt]

It's not that crazy of a story! Lol I need a realistic ending. Lol

A realistic ending for your scenario? hahahahaha

The real hoot is that there actually are folks who lap this stuff up.

 

[sethp]

Really? You're going to troll a fellow author? One who is probably better than you and more popular and who writes for the pure fun of it? I'm appalled. Why? Why fuck with someone and insult them for no other reason than because you're a Dick? Because you're an ass? I suppose you hate Harry potter because its implausible? I suppose you hate King because evil spirits don't exist? I suppose you hate anything that's not highbrow, masterpiece theatre and Shakespeare enough for you? Fuck! Bite me!

Jesus Christ! I'm so sick of mean spirited people who think their shit doesn't stink and live to denigrate others.

Fuck the lot of you douche bags!

Oh...sorry....I think I forgot to tell you to fuck yourselves!


Wait, wait, wait a minute...I get it. All stories that we don't like...well we can just insult the authors, stories plot devices, characters and everything, because that way we'll have a chaotic, hate filled, antagonistic, unhelpful, ugly little community of authors and readers that hate each other. So, that's what we're going for here. Ah...

Okay...okay...I probably should have posted something about douche bags and rectums....

 

[sethp]

Troll much?

 

[sr71plt]

Well, I don't have to ask anyone else how to end a story.

I'm happy you like that stuff. I don't have to, though.

 

[StrangeLife]

He proves it, by shoving his cock in her mouth..she tastes another woman on his cock...putting two and two together...he admits that he was with his sister while he's fucking his mother....

"Oh my - both of them? What a virile guy you are," she whispered hoarsely while massaging his cock with a firm grip. "You definitely deserve to enjoy the butt plug today. Let me get the lube."

She reached for the bottle of Super Glue...

 

[Handley_Page]

It's not that crazy of a story! Lol I need a realistic ending. Lol

The trial and conviction of the bad guys

 

[RichardBacula]

The trial and conviction of the bad guys

Yup.
Or, at the least, their arrest.

Because the basic plot of the story is "Guy goes undercover in order to take down a gang," so that's the plot that most needs to be resolved.
He needs to take them down, or die trying, or get scared off. The first would be the more satisfying ending.

The stuff with his family could he handled a number of ways:
-They could all end up alienated and awkward, avoiding each other.
-Any combo of two of them could end up alienated and awkward, avoiding each other.
-The three of them could all remain on good terms, either with two of them being a couple, or all three being a trio.
-It could remain unresolved, with the characters uncertain how they feel about it, and unclear on what they can or should do about it.

Personally, I'd suggest that the three of them NOT all hook up together, because that just loses the pretense of realism, unless you do one fan-fucking-tastic job of establishing character traits and backgrounds that make that kind of thing plausible.
Just having the brother and sister be in love with each other seems like a stretch. One heck of a coincidence that the guy's forced to have sex with the woman he's in love with, and it happens to be his sister. Not that coincidences are story-killing, just that they should be done well.
Two normal siblings do not just suddenly bang each other, then realize that they're romantically in love with each other after the fact. In fact, I'd say that two normal siblings don't love each other romantically at all, and I have to ask how much you think your story would be compromised by ditching that aspect.
If a significant part of the fantasy is specifically the romantic aspect, then that's one thing. But if it's just there to add a kind of "But it's okay that they fucked, because they're in love!" sort of apology/bandage after the fact, I don't think it's necessary.
A brother and sister can love each other enough to deal with that kind of thing without loving each other romantically.
I'd say that by zooming in on the night that they have sex with each other by choice, you can probably figure out how to resolve the family issues. WHY do they choose to have sex with each other?

Because they're In Love? Well, cool. But if so, that love shouldn't come out of nowhere or exist in a vacuum. It's going to be something that's been there, underlying the surface of their relationship for years, maybe their entire lives, screwing up their love and sex lives with other people. In which case, they can get the pseudo-happy ending of reluctantly accepting that their forbidden love is the only kind of love that they're ever going to get, and deciding that since they've been forced to taste the forbidden fruit, they might as well keep eating it. So to speak. Especially since it pales in comparison (or could pale, in their minds at least) to the fucked-uppedness of the guy's sex with his own mother.

Because they're trying to heal an emotionally traumatic event? That happens sometimes with victims of sexual assault, which the two siblings actually ARE in this story as presented, since they're forced to have sex with each other or die. Maybe they have sex later in order to make it okay in their minds that they were forced to do it the first time, to pretend that it was their decision on some real level, as well as to take physical comfort in each others' arms.

Because they're mentally fucked up in the first place? If so, then the reason why they're fucked up might hold some clues to the future. Maybe they just have strange sexual issues to begin with. Maybe their mother molested them both as children, and the forced incest brings it back to them, and they just freak out on each other. They might not see incest as a big deal, if they were raised in that environment, and it might lead to some kind of resolution with the mother, either an even more fucked up "We remember the things you did to us now, mother, but it's okay because we know you just loved us!" kind of ending, or a "You're a bad parent who really fucked us up, so we're going to quit talking to you and run off together" kind of ending.

Or maybe it's none of that.
But any answers you find have to come from within the story and the characters, so the more details you add into the mix early on (if only in your head), the more you delve into what makes these characters tick, the more easily you'll be able to figure out what they'd do in the end.

 

[oggbashan]

So I'm almost finished a story but don't know how to end it.

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Help ...the danger is that I'll end it too abruptly and unsatisfyingly.

I think OUR problem with giving you ideas is that most of us wouldn't write such a story.

But I agree that he has to complete his task of taking the gang down and then has to rebuild his relationships with his mother and sister.

From the point of Lit's readers of incest, continuing to have sex with both is probably the best solution with the obligatory "we shouldn't be doing this, but we like it..."

 

[Zeb_Carter]

Troll much?

Of course he does.


His sister helps him get the goods on the gang, the SWAT team shows up and takes them all in. He gets his sister out because she was his CI and his mom and sister move in with him and they live happily ever after.

or

Mom, who just happens to be the DA prosecutes the gang. Sis has to testify and go into witsec. With sis out of the way, mom has son all to herself.

 

[PennLady]

It's not that crazy of a story! Lol I need a realistic ending. Lol

I don't think you need or want a realistic ending -- your story isn't realistic, but that's fine. You need an ending that fits the story. So what do you want to happen, and what would make that happen realistically within the confines of the story?

If people are rooting for your hero, then having him take down the bad guys, possibly while suffering a serious but not fatal injury in the process, is probably a good bet. If he can do that and get the girl, so much the better.

But if you think something darker is called for, go for that.

 

[sethp]

Well, I don't have to ask anyone else how to end a story.

I'm happy you like that stuff. I don't have to, though.

That doesn't cut it. You don't have to insult those you don't like. Why would you do that? Why purposely try to hurt someone and the pretend that your taking the high road. You're not.

 

[sethp]

"Oh my - both of them? What a virile guy you are," she whispered hoarsely while massaging his cock with a firm grip. "You definitely deserve to enjoy the butt plug today. Let me get the lube."

She reached for the bottle of Super Glue...

You need to get a life. Although I suppose sitting around in your underwear trolling the Internet because you have no other talent, no job and no real life friends does count as life, although not one worth living in my opinion.

 

[jomar]

they get some of the bad guys but have to go into witness protection and move to Utah, mom and sister become sister-wives and they live HEA...until the mob finds them, which sets up the next story in the series.

 

[sethp]

Thank you, fellow authors. You've given me what I need. This is fantasy of course and perhaps realistic wasn't the right word, in the manner of say any almost any movie...bill and teds excellent adventure, avatar, the matrix, daddy daycare , trading spaces or Star Wars. None of those are plausible and the characters do things we wouldn't do or could do. Not everything needs to be an Oscar winner or a Victorian drama to be good or popular. You're all opera singers, symphonic orchestras, award winning jazz artists, and studio musicians, but somebody has to be Justin Timberlake and Katy Perry. That's me.

 

[sr71plt]

That doesn't cut it. You don't have to insult those you don't like. Why would you do that? Why purposely try to hurt someone and the pretend that your taking the high road. You're not.

The horselaugh is for asking for a realistic ending to a totally unrealistic (and juvenile) story--and, actually, asking for someone else to give you a story ending while calling yourself a writer. I think you use the word "troll" entirely too loosely.

I gave you what I think was a logical ending to the mess of a storyline you provided. If you find it not "realistic," I think you should take a good look at your storyline.

 

[StrangeLife]

You need to get a life. Although I suppose sitting around in your underwear trolling the Internet because you have no other talent, no job and no real life friends does count as life, although not one worth living in my opinion.

Mom?

 

[sethp]

Mom?

You are a sick fuck. You and your buddy are both going on ignore.

 

[StrangeLife]

You are a sick fuck...

Don't knock it till you try it...