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I was going through my archives and came across the first part of a story I wrote years ago. I never went further because I developed writer's block after writing the introduction. So let me post what I have thus far and perhaps some kind soul can give me an idea of how to proceed:


I’m a happily married man with a great life. My wife is beautiful and she satisfies me in every way but one: even after years of marriage and despite my most earnest please, she won’t let me in her backdoor. I’ve always been an ass man and the main reason I married her was because of her gorgeous buns which are the perfect size and shape. I’d run my hand over those sweet cheeks every time we went out, kneading and caressing that nubile flesh. I was sure then that one day, I’d be able to drill her where the sun doesn’t shine.

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When I met my wife she was adamant about not having sex before we were married. However, she assured me that my desire to ream her was fine.

“No funny business before marriage,” she would often say, “but once you say ‘I do’ you can butt-fuck me up the ass every night if you want.

Tragically and much to my chagrin, she was singing a different tune after we wed.

“No way I’m letting you stick that pecker up my ass,” she insisted. “You’ll just have to give up being a tail gunner because my butthole is off-limits.” She accused me of having a fanny fetish and placated me by telling me that my giant schlong would never fit in her tight dumper.

I was disappointed but I didn’t give up my efforts. I was constantly pleading and begging to get her to spread her butt cheeks for me. Once when she was asleep, I even lubed up my meaty boner, gently crawled into bed next to her and pulled up the sheets, exposing her bare buttocks. I moved my rock hard dong over her outer globes until the tip of the head was pressed against her sweet bunghole. Just as I was about to shove my pecker inside, she awoke and began screaming and cursing at me. She called me numbnuts, peckerwood, shit-for-brains and then a no-good, dirty ass pirate. Needless to say, our relationship cooled after that.

My life took another turn a few days later when I came home early from work to surprise my wife. I picked her up some flowers and was hoping to make nice after my unsuccessful attempt at reaming her. I received the shock of my life when I entered our house, though, because I could hear her moaning and sighing in the throes of orgasm. I thought maybe she was using her favorite vibrator because she hadn’t let me get it on with her since the butt jam incident. Soon I realized she was not alone as I heard a man panting and moaning too.

I quietly walked to our bedroom door and peeked around the corner. My wife was riding him, grinding her hot snatch into his cock. Just then, she jumped off him and turned around to bend over. I cold see he had an enormous rod, much bigger than my average meat. When my wife was on all fours, she reached back to spread her butt cheeks for him.

“Do me in the backdoor!” she screamed. “I want to feel your giant dick deep inside my fanny apple. Screw my rosebud and fill my bowels with your nut juice!” I was quite taken aback by this strange turn of events.


This is where I got bogged down. Any ideas on how to proceed?
 
Make him a cuckhold who gets off on watching others take her ass because she won't ever give it to him.
 
Just my two cents, but avoid certains terms or words like "fanny apple" or "nut juice." Made me laugh, actually, and is that the reaction you want? I am a big believer in less is more and especially when it comes to writing erotica, trying to come up with other words for pussy and cock, or other sexy parts of the male/female anatomy, becomes (to me) just silly. Hope this helps a little...
 
Just my two cents, but avoid certains terms or words like "fanny apple" or "nut juice." Made me laugh, actually, and is that the reaction you want? I am a big believer in less is more and especially when it comes to writing erotica, trying to come up with other words for pussy and cock, or other sexy parts of the male/female anatomy, becomes (to me) just silly. Hope this helps a little...

Yes, but if "less is more" just think how much more "more" will be?

I will take your advice on the one point. I've already changed "fanny apple" to keister and I changed one other use of "ass" to caboose crack. However, I must stand firm with "hot nut juice" because that helps to capture the essence of the moment. :)
 
Yes, but if "less is more" just think how much more "more" will be?

I will take your advice on the one point. I've already changed "fanny apple" to keister and I changed one other use of "ass" to caboose crack. However, I must stand firm with "hot nut juice" because that helps to capture the essence of the moment. :)

Well stated points! Actually, one of my favorite writers who is known for his hardcore and extreme material often uses such words and terms, including "nut" and other such colorful ways of describing anything sexual. But you have to be familiar with his style of work to get my meaning. First time I'd ever heard of the word "split tail" was in one of his books. :D
 
Yes, but if "less is more" just think how much more "more" will be?

I will take your advice on the one point. I've already changed "fanny apple" to keister and I changed one other use of "ass" to caboose crack. However, I must stand firm with "hot nut juice" because that helps to capture the essence of the moment. :)

I'm glad you decided to use "caboose crack".
 
I'm going to go out on a limb here, but I'm guessing that the next thing that happens is the stud fucks the wife up the ass while the hubby watches. Does he stay hidden, or does he reveal himself to confront them, only to find that they proceed with the assfucking anyways, audience be damned?
 
I'm going to go out on a limb here, but I'm guessing that the next thing that happens is the stud fucks the wife up the ass while the hubby watches. Does he stay hidden, or does he reveal himself to confront them, only to find that they proceed with the assfucking anyways, audience be damned?

Which way do you think works best? It could be that the husband watches his wife get boned up the butt and keeps his distance, only to confront her later about it. Or perhaps he waits until the stud unleashes his massive load deep in her dumper and then rushes in to take his turn. Or it could even be that he bursts in on them to confront her for her infidelity and for her apparent duplicity at refusing his desire for backdoor action yet all the while obviously craving it from someone else with a more meaty boner. I could go either way myself.
 
Yeah, maybe it's what you're going for but I'd have a real hard time taking a story with those sorts of terms for body parts seriously.
 
Yeah, maybe it's what you're going for but I'd have a real hard time taking a story with those sorts of terms for body parts seriously.

If you have any ideas, I'd love to read them. I also was thinking about a few tweaks today. For instance, what if I would use "patootie" or even "fart hole" to describe the scene with the wife and the other man? I want to capture the raw energy and perversity of the moment and if you just use the word "ass" that can also refer to just having sex, as in "I got me some ass last night."

The other twist I was thinking of was having the husband hear the other man before he saw his wife and the man would say something like, "Turn around and spread your ass cheeks. I'm going to leave you butt up with a flower in it."
 
How about this:

The husband stands back and watches his wife get taken anally. He wants to stop it, but he's curious to see it, and of course at the same time he's heart broken. He quitely leaves after it's over.

Later that night, he brings it up out of no where and tells his wife that he saw the whole thing.

She cries and admits the truth; that he's her boss and she's been doing it for a raise or whatever. The boss loves taking her anally and demands that he be the only one who can claim her there. And also, the boss would know if she let anyone fuck her there if it's loose or not.

So the husband agrees (since she makes a lot of money) to let it continue, but only if he gets to be there and watch.

So perhaps the next time she gets fucked up her ass, he gets to watch. And afterwards he gets to finally fuck here there too.
 
btw, this sounds a little mean and shallow:


and the main reason I married her was because of her gorgeous buns


How about her ass was the main reason he asked her out on a date the first time they met or something?
 
Of course, if this was for Lit, the main character's "fond memories of his mother's asshole in the laundry room when he was a boy" will not be allowed.
 
btw, this sounds a little mean and shallow:





How about her ass was the main reason he asked her out on a date the first time they met or something?

Thanks a lot for your pointers! I appreciate you taking the time.
 
Of course, if this was for Lit, the main character's "fond memories of his mother's asshole in the laundry room when he was a boy" will not be allowed.

Remember now, "boy" has a myriad of meanings. It can refer to a close friend (as in, "he's my boy") or it can refer to a colleague (as in "the boys from the office") or even as an address to a male servant who is fully grown. Sometimes you have to do more than simply glance at writing in to understand the gist of what is taking place. For example, last weekend I found myself completely at sea while reading the menu while I was on a date and had no clue what to order until my date politely pointed out that the menu was written in Italian. Were you familiar with my style and motivation, you would never have assumed that pedophilia was on my mind as I wrote. Oftentimes everyday occurrences that can help to shape our sexuality are perfectly innocent in nature at the time and that was certainly the intent in this case. However, if it would make you more comfortable I could go back and edit the original post to say something like, "When I was 18, I saw my mother's sweet rosebud in the laundry room and it gave me such a raging boner that I vowed right then and there to marry a broad with tight buns who would let me butt slam her every night."
 
However, if it would make you more comfortable I could go back and edit the original post to say something like, "When I was 18, I saw my mother's sweet rosebud in the laundry room and it gave me such a raging boner that I vowed right then and there to marry a broad with tight buns who would let me butt slam her every night."

Point is, for Lit you'd have to. :rolleyes: Yes, "boy" can mean a variety of things, but when talking of "fond memories of mum's asshole when I was a boy" and then moving on to his current, adult age it seems you did not mean "any of those other meanings" like adult man servant. :rolleyes:
 
Point is, for Lit you'd have to. :rolleyes: Yes, "boy" can mean a variety of things, but when talking of "fond memories of mum's asshole when I was a boy" and then moving on to his current, adult age it seems you did not mean "any of those other meanings" like adult man servant. :rolleyes:

Boy, nothing get by you! It's quite obvious that your Nebraska education was top notch. Congrats to you and your sexagenarian boyfriend on your superior intellect. I see now why you're the Queen of Literotica with your sharp wit, mind like a steel trap and a boyfriend with "sex" in the title of his demographic classification to boot.

By the way, I never use the word "mum" because I don't think it's dignified.
 
If you have any ideas, I'd love to read them. I also was thinking about a few tweaks today. For instance, what if I would use "patootie" or even "fart hole" to describe the scene with the wife and the other man?

Yup, nothing sexier than "Fart hole".

Ok, I'm guessing you're joking at this point. Best of luck with the story.
 
Boy, nothing get by you! It's quite obvious that your Nebraska education was top notch. Congrats to you and your sexagenarian boyfriend on your superior intellect. I see now why you're the Queen of Literotica with your sharp wit, mind like a steel trap and a boyfriend with "sex" in the title of his demographic classification to boot.

By the way, I never use the word "mum" because I don't think it's dignified.

She's just helping you make sure you story doesn't get swatted out of hand due to linguistic vagueness. Just mention that it happened when he was home from college. Presumably the mom had just gotten used to not having the kids around once he had shipped off to school.

Here's a possibility for a twist: He stays and watches, maybe even beats off while watching from the cracked-open door. And then his wife taps him on the shoulder.

Surprise! It's his wife's twin sister and her live-in boyfriend. Turns out they're crashing on the couch "just for a few days" until they can find a new place to live after they got evicted for too many noise complaints. So how does the wife react to seeing her husband beat off to her sister getting assfucked? Especially how does she react when she realizes he thought it was her getting it up the off ramp from this other guy?
 
The original poster of this thread is hilarious. that was some funny shit! crack-apples or someting like that. patootie and farting starfish. Oh my god you are funny:)
 
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