Need Help...Writer's block? or lack of knowledge

[Widow_C]

here's the premise...young school teacher in school on vacation day with custodian. I can get this far but have no idea where to go with it...any classroom fantasies out there that might lend some support? Here's the lead paragraph:

Proving his need, he pulled her closer and she felt the bulge in his pants. The canvas was taut over his manhood, strained but holding. Her body responded to such power, such need, she shuddered and all logical thought disappeared. He lifted her, grabbing her butt cheeks and she wrapped her legs around his waist, her arms now around his neck. He swung them around and sat her on the counter. He trailed kisses down her neck, his hands fumbling with her sweater.

 

[PennLady]

You need more than this, I think. Is this all you have, or all you have of the sex scene? What would happen would depend on the characters -- who are they? What do they like, or not? Why are they attracted to each other, if only for casual sex?

 

[DeeZire]

Penn Lady nailed it. The sex scene you have written wouldn't even appear till page two or three. (LIT pages are approximately 3,500 words.)

 

[Widow_C]

thanks anyway

I have much more...I have the entire set up...what I need is what happens at this point...how does the man proceed? What would he do since he is in control at this point in an empty classroom in a school...alone...2 people.
I just need help with this scene...not the 4 pages I've already written...but thanks anyway

 

[sr71plt]

I would put some tension-building stuff on the front of it (LATER: And maybe you have; I wrote this before seeing your last post). Her seeing him in a bar perhaps, just like another guy, while she's having a girls' night out. The women are talking provocatively about men they would melt to. They're talking hot young professionals. She says she has her eyes out for a doctor, but one with intellectual interests to match hers. Hot, though, of course. As they talk, she sees him at the bar, and sees that he's everything the woman describe as wanting in physical elements. He sees her watching, and there's some "knowing" connection eyework between them. But she leaves before he can come over.

Then, later, she sees him in the hall at school when she's working late. Now he's just the custodian. She's disappointed he's just a custodian, but she keeps going back to take a peek, heated up by how hot he looks. He notices her coming back. Seeing that, in embarrassment, she withdraws to her classroom. She doesn't know what she wants, what she should do. She's hot for him, but he's only a school custodian.

She sees him peering into the window of the door, and she backs up to her desk, distressed, full of mixed emotions. He enters and just walks over to her and lifts her to sitting on her desk, brushes her skirt up around her waist, and takes her mouth in a kiss as he rubs her crotch with his basket. She moans and he reaches down to clutch her triangle with a strong hand, working a finger through a leg hole of her panties, seeking . . . and finding. She moans and begins to move with the rubbing of the finger.

And then take it from there.

 

[sr71plt]

Oh, and the ending of the story? I like twists, so mine would probably end with her being well fucked and just left lying on the desk. She struggles up and stumbles home, thinking about him all night, not being able hardly to wait until school next day. Not caring now that he's just a custodian. Racing to school, and searching for him. The school custodian she finds is old and wiry, and nope, there's no custodian here other than him. The office confirms that. She mopes all day, having hot flashes and remembering him inside her. Dejected, she leaves school late that afternoon. He's sitting in a car in the parking lot, smiling at her. Waiting for her.

 

[sr71plt]

Oh, and if you can't handle the fuck scene part of it on your own, perhaps you shouldn't be trying to write this story. Good luck with it.

 

[DeeZire]

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I just need help with this scene...not the 4 pages I've already written...but thanks anyway

I would think you could open any one of the thousands and thousands of stroke stories here at LIT and find what you're looking for. I too struggle with the sex scenes. I much prefer writing about what happens before, and after.

Perhaps your character's personalities would dictate how the sex scene goes. Would she tend to be submissive, or would arousal awaken a sleeping tiger? Would she be multi-orgasmic, or just have one big one and then want to curl up and cuddle? (Hard to do on a desk.) Would the guy be rough or gentle? Or would guilt suddenly kick in and motivate him to make it a perfunctory act so he could just get it over with? Sadly, it may take some planning to figure out the mechanizations of the sex.

Good luck.

 

[Widow_C]

Nevermind sorry I came here for ideas and a lead to break the block, apparently your idea of help consists of contempt and critism. Write your own story with it. Thanks

 

[PennLady]

Nevermind sorry I came here for ideas and a lead to break the block, apparently your idea of help consists of contempt and critism. Write your own story with it. Thanks

We're trying to help, people have tossed out ideas, but we're not telling you what to write. In fact, we can't, since we haven't seen the preceding pages. We don't know what either of the characters are like. All we know is at this point, the man is in control, and that's from you telling us, not even from the paragraph you gave us.

DeeZire gave you good advice, and ideas. It's up to you to decide how or if to follow it.

 

[Widow_C]

Yes and I apologize for my outburst. Thank you

 

[sr71plt]

Here's the lead paragraph:

Sorry, but when you posted this in the OP, I got the impression that what you were giving was your proposed opening paragraph in the story. That's sort of what it says.

 

[GinaeEvans]

Nevermind sorry I came here for ideas and a lead to break the block, apparently your idea of help consists of contempt and critism. Write your own story with it. Thanks

Writers have to have thick skins. No matter how good you become, or how enthralling your story may be, someone will always have something negative to say.

Don't take it personally. Just rise to the challenge.

 

[Widow_C]

again I apologize...I needed help with the flow of the sex scene between two people in a classroom...not one of my fantasies so .... but I think I've got it now. I didn't want to include the whole story line so it was just the lead in to the scene.
Again thank you...
write on

 

[Handley_Page]

One may reasonably assume that you have made love some time in your own life.
So how did things go from on to another with you?