Need help for my voyeur story...

[CompletelyAverage]

Need help with my voyeur story...

Greetings, friends!

I'm currently in the middle of writing a voyeur story. The shorthand version is two friends (a guy and a girl) take a trip to Miami. The guy has had a crush on the girl since college and hopes to romance the girl while on the trip. However, on the first night of the trip, the girl meets a very famous man at a bar and they end up fucking in his top floor suite.

Here's where I'm running into problems. Despite the kind of cheesy setup, I'd like this story to stay more on the realistic side. That being said, voyeur/cuckold isn't the most realistic genre. In my first draft, the famous guy invites the girl's friend up to the suite and he watches her get fucked. This seemed unrealistic because why would the girl let her best friend watch her have sex. In my next draft, the guy would have hid in a closet or on a balcony and would have accidentally seen them having sex. I scrapped this because it felt a boring and uninteresting.

I'm basically looking for tips/suggestions for these 2 things.

1. A reason/situation why the girl would be okay with her best friend watching her get fucked.

OR

2. A more interesting way for guy to witness them having sex.


If you have any other suggestions, situations or completely new ideas you'd like to give me, I'd love to hear them.

 

[RockHardKP]

Seems like the bluetooth concept from another thread would work nicely here..........The girl phones her friend to let him know that she does not plan to be home soon. Then in her excitement she forgets to hangup the line and her friend listens into the nights action as she gets thoroughly fucked all night long.

 

[sethp]

They go up to he famous guys room for a party. The guy passes out, and then the famous guy and the girl have sex. They're all a little drunk so there aren't any inhibitions. The friend wakes up for some reason and walks in on them or sees them fucking in the other room.

 

[callmeismael]

Famous guy is an asshole alpha-male type. He's hanging out with the two friends, he recognizes the guy's got a crush, and also that the girl's got a crush on him (famous guy). He pretends to befriend both of them. Next day, he invites the guy over, hangs out with him a bit in the kitchen. The doorbell rings, and famous guy tells regular guy to wait here. Famous guy opens the door; it's the girl, who he invites in, and immediately starts kissing. Basically, this is what turns him on, and how he exerts his apha-maleness: fucking a pretty girl and while some regular guy who crushes on the girl but never acts on it watches. The poor guy has little choice but to watch from the kitchen-door while his friend gets fucked by the famous guy.

 

[Sean Renaud]

My first answer to you would be that you are simply thinking too much about this. The beauty of the Voyeur is that they either intentionally set up to watch, in which case a "far too convienent" laptop with a webcam left on will do just fine, or stumbled on a situation too hot to walk away from. In which case they get separated somehow and the hotel room they are in is sufficiently large (or the lady and her celeb are sufficiently loud and or drunk) that they don't notice the door opening and keep going. Or he could already be in the room, say in the bathroom or out on the balcony when they stumble in and start fucking and he watches from the balcony.

Alternatively she/he didn't mind being watched and when he/she noticed the third party in the room made an effort to keep the other from knowing they were being watched.

I say you're thinking about it a bit too much because how you get into the scenario in fiction is often the part you're supposed to sorta suspend reality for and then re-establish it later. Nobody really questions why there is a solar powered alien in Metropolis, it's generally taken for granted that despite spectacular car chases that literally demolish entire cities that basically nobody in the world can identify James Bond on sight alone, the cops at SVU see more field action in a year than most cops see in their entire career and the cast of Friends has one helluva apartment considering their combined income is garbage. Just tell your readers "this fucking happened" and as long as it doesn't conflict with your other rules it's rare that anybody will give you shit.

 

[CompletelyAverage]

Alternatively she/he didn't mind being watched and when he/she noticed the third party in the room made an effort to keep the other from knowing they were being watched.

I should mention that my plan is to have the celeb know the girl's friend is watching.

You're probably right that I'm over thinking things. I just want the story to make sense within itself.

 

[HeyAll]

1. A reason/situation why the girl would be okay with her best friend watching her get fucked.

She's afraid of being drugged, or taken advantage of. He offers to watch over her, or maybe she makes the offer to him.

2. A more interesting way for guy to witness them having sex.

Hiding in the closet always works.

 

[BurningMonkey]

Twist: Maybe the girl has always secretly crushed on the ordinary guy, also, and she thinks that if he "accidently" sees her getting fucked he'll realize what a slut she can be and finally make his move, which is what she's wanted all along.

Twist: Maybe the famous guy ends up being a dud in bed, and the girl leaves totally frustrated, sees ordinary guy, realizes he's seen her having sex, grabs him and fucks the living shit out of him, in the process realizing that he's what she's wanted all along.

 

[Sean Renaud]

I should mention that my plan is to have the celeb know the girl's friend is watching.

You're probably right that I'm over thinking things. I just want the story to make sense within itself.

I intentionally left that part open. So the guy knows he's being watched, he may even have done it completely on purpose. So now he's making faces and super exagerating everything (think Pro-Wrestling and now sometimes a guy can get completely missed by a kick and still go flopping around the ring like a fish out of water. Maybe even demanding the girl give a facial or anal or something else she normally wouldn't do but he likes because it makes him feel all extra alpha-y when a woman says "Oh I never let my husband/boyfriend/fiancee do that! I feel so dirty!"

 

[CompletelyAverage]

I intentionally left that part open. So the guy knows he's being watched, he may even have done it completely on purpose. So now he's making faces and super exagerating everything (think Pro-Wrestling and now sometimes a guy can get completely missed by a kick and still go flopping around the ring like a fish out of water. Maybe even demanding the girl give a facial or anal or something else she normally wouldn't do but he likes because it makes him feel all extra alpha-y when a woman says "Oh I never let my husband/boyfriend/fiancee do that! I feel so dirty!"

Basically, the celeb will be saying things out loud, which the girl just thinks are dirty talk, but are actually taunts to the guy he knows is watching from the closet(or webcam or whatever I end up going with).

The celeb is definitely an alpha-male. By this point in the story, he knows that the friend is in love with the girl and it gives him great satisfaction to use his money, good looks, and large cock to take that away from him.

 

[Hypoxia]

My response from the other forum where you first posted this:

One possible scenario (fantasy, of course, but this IS Literotica, after all): The guy works on security systems. When the girl goes upstairs with the celeb, the guy is jealous, suspicious, even anxious about her safety. So he hooks his laptop into the hotel net and hacks their security camera system -- piece of cake, he's installed a dozen like it. He knows these celeb suites are covered with spycams. He watches everything in realtime from the miserable comfort of his hotel room.

Then what?

 

[Sean Renaud]

That actually complicates things more than it simplifies them. Now the celeb in addition to knowing the guy like the girl, which a fairly observant man could pick up almost instantly just by watching body language, he has to also know his skill set would allow him to hack the security and that his insecurity/morals would allow him to do that.

That actually causes more problems than it solves IMHO.

 

[CompletelyAverage]

My response from the other forum where you first posted this:

One possible scenario (fantasy, of course, but this IS Literotica, after all): The guy works on security systems. When the girl goes upstairs with the celeb, the guy is jealous, suspicious, even anxious about her safety. So he hooks his laptop into the hotel net and hacks their security camera system -- piece of cake, he's installed a dozen like it. He knows these celeb suites are covered with spycams. He watches everything in realtime from the miserable comfort of his hotel room.

Then what?

I kinda like this idea. It doesn't really fit with this story but I think I might incorporate it into another story I'm working on.

 

[loquere]

Google glass.

 

[Sidney_1]

I haven't read through all your replies. . . but, if you're looking for "logic". . .why have an excuse? What if all 3 of them are just kinky. . . perhaps the girls are bisexual and it's a turn-on for the fella and the ladies?

Or, perhaps it's a novelty thing to do for the two girls to do when they visit Miami. . . it's easy to get caught up in the spirit of the place. Especially, after you've been dancing. . .

Have you ever been to South Beach and the hotels off Lincoln Blvd? I would try to channel some of that energy into your story.

 

[CompletelyAverage]

Have you ever been to South Beach and the hotels off Lincoln Blvd? I would try to channel some of that energy into your story.

Yes, I have been to South Beach. That's pretty much what inspired this story.

 

[Sidney_1]

Yes, I have been to South Beach. That's pretty much what inspired this story.

Great, then you know what I mean. There's a unique energy to that place, and if you can incorporate some of that energy into your story, then it's not a stretch for 2 young ladies to be exploring their sexuality.

If it was my story. . . I'd have the 2 friends on vacation. . . as almost everyone is a bit more open to trying new things in a new place, etc. etc.

 

[ender27]

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[ender27]

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[CompletelyAverage]

Or perhaps one or some of her girlfriends are also on the trip and it's more of a competition of who gets the celeb first and she's asking him to be a good wingman and help make it happen?

That's an interesting idea.

 

[Hypoxia]

That actually complicates things more than it simplifies them. Now the celeb in addition to knowing the guy like the girl, which a fairly observant man could pick up almost instantly just by watching body language, he has to also know his skill set would allow him to hack the security and that his insecurity/morals would allow him to do that.

That actually causes more problems than it solves IMHO.

Causes problems? How? The only setup the OP listed was this: However, on the first night of the trip, the girl meets a very famous man at a bar and they end up fucking in his top floor suite.

I'll assign names. The girl is Alice. Her buddy is Bob. The celeb is Chas.

How is Chas (the celeb) supposed to know (from casual observation) that Bob is an IT security pro? Oh sure, there are possible contrivances: Bob lets slip his profession while talking to Chas. Or Alice blabs to Chas about her blue-balled buddy Bob. Or Chas has his own security goons, who ID Bob and warn their boss of his skills. He might heed their warnings. Or he may want to just fuck with Bob.

But those are all contrived and unnecessary. The basic storyline: Alice & Bob go to hotel bar. Alice circulates, meets Chas, is swept away. Maybe Chas cuts in while they dance and verbally seduces Alice. He asks about her former dance partner. She replies, "Oh, he's just a work buddy, forget about him," and says nothing more about him because SHE WANTS TO BALL THE CELEB, right?

So, Chas has no clue as to Bob's skills or drives. Bob is free to hack the security system. Surveillance ensues. The big question is: What then? How does Bob react? Does he go all BTB, or wimpy, or voyeur, or what? Possibility: He records hacked spycam videos to blackmail Chas, or Alice; or (as suggested by the OP) for his own voyeuristic pleasure.

For a darker storyline, Bob sees Chas mistreat Alice. How does he react?

For a voyeuristic comedy, Bob taps ALL the spycams and compares the erotic action in the various suites. Maybe he sees MUCH HOTTER action in other rooms and forgets about Alice -- that ditzy dame Delfina is really awesome! Maybe he feeds all the hot videos to a Net or TV channel, so many others can watch, too.

For a stroker, Bob watches the action, maybe between Alice and Chas (and their guests), maybe in the other suites covered by spycams -- and describes each interaction in ultra-graphic detail.

Are many possibilities and few problems unless they're self-imposed.

 

[ender27]

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[Sean Renaud]

The problem (if we're sticking to the OPs idea. I'll be the first to admit I don't always do that and I may steal your idea if I can get to the second tier of the Survivor contest. I'm winning this year. Hands fucking down.) is that the OP wants the Stud to be aware that he's being watched and basically flaunting that he's fucking his woman. So him not being aware that the guy hacked the security kills what the OP wants.

Your idea is amazing on it's own.

 

[CompletelyAverage]

Your idea is amazing on it's own.

It is a really good idea.

 

[SDLRob]

Realistic reason? Drink.... Celeb invites the girl (who has a crush in said celeb) and her friend to his penthouse for drinks and gets them both tipsy. You could have it that the celeb is secretly bisexual & gets a thrill by bringing a couple to his place and seducing the girl infront of the guy in the hope the guy gets hard and jerks off watching... Or more.

Girl is too turned on that the celeb she's fucked herself dreaming about is seducing her to care that her friend can see her naked & getting fucked.