Need help editing a story

[Flmwf]

Hi, I have written a story about a past expiereance, I'm sure I made some grammar and spelling errors, but the main thing I'm looking for is help with the flow of things. I put it down the best I remember, it happened 12 years ago. I tried to put write how it went, and capture the flavor of the event, but I obviously don't remember the exact words. If anybody is interested the story is about me and a black coworker at work

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

You might get a better response if you switch on your Private Messages. Go to User CP (top left of this page) then click on Edit Options (in the left hand column) and then tick Enable Private Messaging in the second box down. Make sure that the next box down (Receive Private Messages only from Buddies and Moderators) is NOT ticked. Finally click Save Changes at the bottom of that page.

 

[Flmwf]

Thanks for the info, I have reset it to get private messages