Need feedback on my three new submissions- please!

[FallingToFly]

I've been waiting to see what would happen, but so far, I think I made a mistake posting 21st Century Cure here on Lit. I'd originally offered to trade reviews and advice, but got no takers

Anyone care to read it- not as a celeb story, unless you've seen the movie- and give basic critique on the writing, and more especially the sex and character description? Although they basically started as pure smut with just enough plot for me to justify the sex, I'm concerned by the cold reception they've gotten.

Have I lost my smut touch?

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Will give them a read tomorrow but I would bet you haven't lost your smut touch.

 

[FallingToFly]

Will give them a read tomorrow but I would bet you haven't lost your smut touch.

I hope not- I used to be pretty damn good at it.

Thanks, Elfie.

 

[FallingToFly]

Still begging for feedback.

I'm shameless.