So I've just finished my first draft of my story, and I could use some feedback on it before I submit.
First off, I'm not kidding about the "novel-length" part. It's 64,000 words long at current count. I expect that this might limit my takers, but I'm pretty sure that word count isn't because of bloat or aimlessness. It's a plot-driven story, so expect it to read more like a novel than a bunch of sex scenes strung together around some thread of a premise. The reason I'm not keen on breaking it up and submitting it by chapter is that it's just not structured to be read that way.
But, if you want to just take a peek at it and give me some feedback on however far you get into it, feel free.
I don't expect anyone to do a detailed grammatical/spelling check on it, given the length, but if you spot any errors I'd appreciate a heads-up.
Luccela
Valera has spent her life on the streets of Yorshir, stealing coin pouches and robbing merchants under the eye of her gang's boss. She's also spent her life getting in trouble with him because of her reckless attitude. Now he's entrusted her with an important job- to steal a bag of valuable gems that he's learned are in the possession of a wealthy merchant.
But her big score turns out to be trouble on two fronts when she gets caught stealing a necklace from the merchant's daughter. Now a tenacious justicar is on her trail, determined to capture her in the name of the law. Worse yet, Valera quickly discovers that the necklace contains the spirit of a sinister being named Luccela.
Valera must find a way to get rid of her cursed loot while keeping out of the hands of the law in this bondage-rich adventure.
This story contains:
Non-con
Bondage
BDSM
M/F and F/F pairings
Action!
Adventure!
Edge-of-your-seat excitement!
Note: If anyone could just send me a junk PM to make sure that my box is set up right, I'd appreciate it. Thanks!
First off, I'm not kidding about the "novel-length" part. It's 64,000 words long at current count. I expect that this might limit my takers, but I'm pretty sure that word count isn't because of bloat or aimlessness. It's a plot-driven story, so expect it to read more like a novel than a bunch of sex scenes strung together around some thread of a premise. The reason I'm not keen on breaking it up and submitting it by chapter is that it's just not structured to be read that way.
But, if you want to just take a peek at it and give me some feedback on however far you get into it, feel free.
I don't expect anyone to do a detailed grammatical/spelling check on it, given the length, but if you spot any errors I'd appreciate a heads-up.
Luccela
Valera has spent her life on the streets of Yorshir, stealing coin pouches and robbing merchants under the eye of her gang's boss. She's also spent her life getting in trouble with him because of her reckless attitude. Now he's entrusted her with an important job- to steal a bag of valuable gems that he's learned are in the possession of a wealthy merchant.
But her big score turns out to be trouble on two fronts when she gets caught stealing a necklace from the merchant's daughter. Now a tenacious justicar is on her trail, determined to capture her in the name of the law. Worse yet, Valera quickly discovers that the necklace contains the spirit of a sinister being named Luccela.
Valera must find a way to get rid of her cursed loot while keeping out of the hands of the law in this bondage-rich adventure.
This story contains:
Non-con
Bondage
BDSM
M/F and F/F pairings
Action!
Adventure!
Edge-of-your-seat excitement!
Note: If anyone could just send me a junk PM to make sure that my box is set up right, I'd appreciate it. Thanks!
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