need advice and comments

[lovermachan]

Hi.,

Iam a new authour to literotica.

My present foucs is on Indian Incest and on celebrities (especially old actress like Srividaya, Ambika etc.,).

My membership page is
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=192298

My story page is on:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=80700

I would appreciate comments and advices from Indian , Non-indian writers about my english,the sensation of the story,the theme and approach etc.,

LoverMachan.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

lovermachan,

You've got the wrong board. Try putting this same message on the Story Feedback forum. To be considered for critique here you miust list your story on the Volunteer thread and then start writing critiques of the stories which have already been accepted.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[vkrminlt]

hi

i`m a regullar reder of sex stories in literotica and now a days incest is my favt topic..glad to see some indian related stories like mom son and sis brother....i fantasy stories have love and passhionate sex with my mom and sis ,which can never happen in practically for me ..any way i have some horny hard on nights fantasising bout it ..love to see som stories like mom sedusing son or accidentely lead to sex when sleeping in bed thing like that ...hope to read somthing like it frm u