Need a Beta reader

[Michael_Lane]

I've got a story about a young woman who goes on an erotic "scavenger hunt", performing acts in semi-public for her voyeuristic master. My said it was only so-so, but couldn't put her finger on why.

Would anyone else like to take a look before I submit it? Always looking to improve.

 

[driphoney]

I've got a story about a young woman who goes on an erotic "scavenger hunt", performing acts in semi-public for her voyeuristic master. My said it was only so-so, but couldn't put her finger on why.

Would anyone else like to take a look before I submit it? Always looking to improve.

You might consider asking in the Story Feedback forum.

 

[Michael_Lane]

Will do. Wasn't sure where to post, so just picked one. I realized some changes I should have made to my first story from the comments after I posted it, so I'd like to try to get this one right the first time.