nee some help with my bdsm song lyrics........?

[kingem125]

:caning:

1)this is a rap song about bdsm and I'm saying I'm the master and the slave.. I'm a switch... but i would make a bit of a better Dom i personally feel...also its trying to make a point against/about the misconceptions and legal issues associated with bdsm.....:caning:

2)its inspired by the song freak bitch by boondox

3) is it good far...? do the lyrics have a good flow to them..?now could someone help me continue where i left off... i want the next line to say something to the effect of why would you discriminate/hate me for what I'm into and what if i did the same thing back to you... also that there wasting there time because i will still do what i want to regardless of what they say...

4)could someone give me some sources / resources to help me gain more knowledge of every aspect of bdsm.......:caning:


here are my lyrics so far:

this beat is a banger it goes hard like when i bang her, rip it out with a hanger in anger i never thought i would be into stranger things,rings gagin no gaspin, stop askin me,just do it your f***ing self I'm tuckin it below the belt you ever felt the rusty blade i grabbed it from the shelf ,i do it all, my self no one else you can't run when you tied down with the belt, i just never felt... never delt somethin so....hated approximated only to decimate defecate in my face desecrate me make me crack that i ask, love seein the leather masked master lookin back, better do what i asked or your gettin it back but you ant comin back from that session, don't need a gat to teach you a lesson I'm guessin you love it when your screamin and moanin,and groanin for, me to stop when i top form you pretty face the tears just drop and wont stop when I'm beatin down now you with a crop, treatin you like used to mop the floor,you seem to scream for more,sure no word is safe look me in my mother f***ing face,I'm so sadistic and sadomasochistic,you asked for this its a power trip, i slit my wrists,and I slip into a trance,i just cant stop,not when i enter ya with the enema,i know I'm sending ya in to a rage i can see it on your face your such a disgrace,do you love it how does it taste,only moving with a fast pace,can i have a taste,is this love or is this hate....



::caning::

 

[kingem125]

people you can skip #4 dont answer it

 

[Angeline]

Personally I think you'll get more response to this on the bdsm board. Most people here don't even identify hip hop or rapping as poetry, not me, necessarily and I do think your lyric has a typical rap rhythm. I am not interested in your subject, especially, and I find poetry about the joy of inflicting pain to be mostly sad and ugly, so maybe post where you'll get more interested readers.

But maybe others here disagree and they can help more than me.

 

[PandoraGlitters]

Honestly this bores me. From the viewpoint of a practiced (journeywoman, even ) switch, this has none of the emotional complexity that makes for a good experience. It is all I used this to hurt her and hurt her a lot. *yawn*

 

[champagne1982]

Snuff rap?
's 'nuff rap?

I don't enjoy anything written that degrades or elevates a person who degrades somebody.
I don't deny you the right to produce it but really, a lyric that describes physical and verbal abuse shouldn't try to wear the handle BDSM.
Just my opinion clouded by my personal philosophy.