Naughty sitter

[Devilish1]

I have a idea to write a story about a naughty sitter with a single dad of a little girl.
Not to worry, the little girl is not in the story.
But i cant seem to figure out how to write the story. from the sitters view or from the single dads view.
Either way im stuck...lol
Anyone have any ideas?
Devilish1

 

[lexium]

Write it from the sitter POV in the third person voice. Ditch the little girl and have her as a house sitter. Getting to the action. She could spend the hole day admiring his possesion while he's at work. He comes home too late for her to go back to her place. By then she has her own ideas about him, and her curiosity leads her to his bedroom, so she could admire him while he slept. In his sleep, his cock makes a tent in the sheet. She got to have a look at it. She pulls back the sheets without waking him, and he is sleeping in the nude. She then has to touch it...

 

[Tatewaki]

I have a idea to write a story about a naughty sitter with a single dad of a little girl.
Not to worry, the little girl is not in the story.
But i cant seem to figure out how to write the story. from the sitters view or from the single dads view.
Either way im stuck...lol
Anyone have any ideas?
Devilish1

Don't make up your mind on POV until you know what story you'd wish to tell, and whose mind would best filter that information. Both 1st person and 3rd person have a lot of things to recommend them. 1st is the easiest voice to write in and is the most immediate, while 3rd is the most flexible.

If I was you, I'd decide what the tale is about, then think about whose voice could best tell the story.

Try this one:

Let's pretend it is about a babysitter putting herself through college and who really needs the cash. When the lecherous father makes his moves on her she rebels. He offers her three times her going rate. She is upset, but the money is desperately needed to get her tuition together and to buy some books for second term. Grudgingly she accepts. The story starts from there.

Now, whose eyes do we use, and in which voice? The answer to that depends on what you are trying to accomplish.

If you are trying to create sympathy for a character, nothing makes it easier than 1st person. Since the entire story is filtered through that one person's mind, everything will automatically be coloured according to that person's perceptions. This makes it easy for that opinion to be presented as truth.

In the case of the girl, the man is painted as a desperate individual who can only get sex if he buys it. He is a disgrace to his beautiful little girl. The babysitter doesn't wonder why the guy's wife left him; he's a loser. She is outraged that he'd put the moves on her, then buy her silence afterwards. She is a nice girl, not a slut, but desperate times call for desperate measures. She takes his money, and gives him sex.

The man feels the woman is a little hard-bodied cock tease, always coming by and flashing ass in her tight Daisy Duke cutoffs. From the first she had flirted with him outrageously. Now that he asks her out, she acts like he's trying to rape her or something! He can't afford and bad press, as his bitch of an ex-wife is still fighting for custody of their beautiful little girl. Any shit goes down, and he can kiss little 'Becca goodbye forever. He offers the babysitter money to keep quiet. Slut that she is, she assumes he's buying sex. He's about to expalin, when she takes the cash, drops to her knees, and starts sucking his cock. It is not what he wanted, but who is he to complain?

Who is right, here? Both of them, and neither of them. Like in life, truth is all point of view, and is highly subjective. Decide whose tale interests you the most, and tell it in that person's mind set.

If you wish information to be available from multiple character's minds, it is best to go to 3rd person. The omniscient voice fails miserably in 1st person.

If detail and milieu is more important than characterization and introspection, use the 3rd person. It is easier to focus on externals in a believable fashion in this POV. A 1st person POV character who talks all day about trivialities starts to annoy.


Anyways, there are a few ideas to get you started. I hope they help.

Regards,

-T

 

[Guest]

But i cant seem to figure out how to write the story. from the sitters view or from the single dads view.
Anyone have any ideas?

Why does it have to come "from" the father/home owner OR the young woman baby/house sitter? Sometimes a third person narrative is the best way to go.

 

[lexium]

I agree

 

[Tatewaki]

Devilish1,

Did any of these suggestions help? Besides being curious, I'm wondering if what I wrote made any sense to you.

-T

 

[Devilish1]

Yes your ideas helped me out alot. Everyones did!
Thank you everyone, i really appreciate the ideas.
I've been suffering from writers block for a while so i was hoping i can get " stir up" by getting some good juicy ideas here.
Sometimes just reading others ideas or storys help me get out of this slump.
I've only been playing around with writing storys from friends or just for my own pleasure for a few years.
I came across one story i wrote for my ex-husband before we got married( Note: I was only 18 then) and i have to admit it wasn't half bad..... lol
Devilish1

 

[SallyIsHere]

person?

I have naughty sitter fantasies, so they are first person. I have written two, but have not submitted them. In one, the single dad catches me masturbating on the "nanny cam" and confronts me. I am so embarrased, but he comforts me and well........it gets hot.

The other one is the flip side. I catch him masturbating in front of the TV. I loves these fantasies, but do agree that third person is more flexible--less personal or confessional.

Sally

 

[jubilee]

It reminds me of one of Alicia Silverstone's earlier films where she is the babysitter and a whole lot of guy fantasize about her in the film (and in reality not only the guys ). Somehow I feel encouraged to write my own A.S. naughty sitter story now that I came across this thread. We'll see what comes out of it.