My Story "Visit to the Cabin"

[Saxman]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=16417
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=16890
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=18044
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=18937

Just was wondering if I should continue with new parts to my story "Visit to the Cabin". I love writing it, but I know the parts are coming slow because of the limited writing time I have. I am in the process of writing another story to give me a break from this one. I appreciate any and all comments.

Thanks!!

 

[Sonia_de_Beaumanoir]

proofreading needed

I don't usually read BDSM stories and can't comment on how well you describe 'the Life." However, I scanned the first chapter. There are quite a number of typos, grammar errors, and changes of tense. All of these can and should be caught by careful re-reading or having another person (e.g., volunteer editor) look over your work.

You mixed up Kim and Sue several times.

Some examples:

it seemed to take Kim and I forever on this trip (case error)

Remain naked until I or Jonathan comes to get you. (verb agreement)

She over at Kim. (fragment)

So whether you should write more is up to you. If you like writing, youi should. if you respect your readers and your craft, you should put some work into polishing the result.

Regards
Sonia