My story submissions!

[In Blue]

It has only been a few months since I began to submit my stories to Literotica for others to read. After enjoying great stories wrote by authors like English Bob and others. I hoped that some of you might enjoy my first submissions. If anyone has read my first two stories and has any thoughts they would like to share, please feel free to suggest any improvments or story development ideas.

IN BLUE

 

[masterstern]

Enjoying the story so far!

Hi Blue,

As i have mention before the first chapter of "Uncertain Feelings" was brillant for your first submission. It was begging to be carried out further by installments, but I was a little disappointed in the seconded chapter you submitted. For some reason I felt it had been rushed and did not deliver what the first did.

However, don't let my comments put you off I am looking forward to the next installment. I would like to find out who the wife is about to bring into thier home, and what else has she been up to during her sexual adventures. There are so many ways you could develop this story. Personally i would enjoy the table being turned on the wife by the husband, and her being forced to submit to him once again.

Well its only a suggestion! ha ha

Anyway keep it horny!


Masterstern

 

[angel_of_merit]

Develop the wife

I agree with M/stern when he said that second chapter was disappointing. I thought that the wife's secret life would lead to even more shocking adventures than the first chapter.

In the first she basically was up for anything with anyone. I remember while reading it thinking that the husband must have been torn between wanting to kill her or admiring her.

Its that tenison you need to put into the next chapter. I want to feel like her behaviour is still very shocking and naughty, yet there's even more ahead.

In the first chapter you had me fumbing with my pants from the begining and I had to read it over again right away. The second chapter was still a good read, but it was missing that horny element from the first.

So please write the next chapter and get me all horny again!

angel of merit

 

[In Blue]

Feedback

Thanks for the constructive feed back on these two submissions. Currently I am working on a follow up chapter to uncertain feelings. You both had valid point about the second chapter, it was a little rushed.

However, until the next installment is submitted you can read my last story which was only published a few days ago. Its called Admiration of Holly, which is a little different from the other two stories. If you have any feed back on this one I would be interested.

IN BLUE

 

[masterstern]

Admiration of Holly

Now this is more like it. I particularly liked the idea of the main character slapping Holly's pussy in front of the other men watching.

Will there be any more about Holly, if soo how about her other adventures of exposing herself.

Horny stuff!!

 

[In Blue]

story of Holly

Hi Masterstern,

It is great to hear you have enjoyed my last story about Holly. As for there been any further installments, well you just have to wait a see. At the moment i am interested in writing the next part of Uncertain Feelings and I don't want to rush it, so please be patient.

IN BLUE