My scores are low

[HusbandsSecret]

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[KeithD]

I only looked at the opening of each. Each is headed with a "race play" warning. You already have it in the Interracial category and yet you start all of them with a suggestion that a big chunk of the readership might not want to read them. And depending on what "race play" is, you might be turning off a whole bunch of other readers too. This might be a place where you could let the category and keywords carry any reasoning for not either wanting to read the story or being set up to not like it.

 

[AlinaX]

Apart from the slight ick at the repeated use of 'penis' and the excessive use of numbers...

... what's 'wonton pleasure'?

 

[lovecraft68]

Apart from the slight ick at the repeated use of 'penis' and the excessive use of numbers...

... what's 'wonton pleasure'?

Its when one achieves orgasm from eating Chinese Food.

 

[lovecraft68]

Is race play what it sounds like? Someone pretends to be a different ethnicity?
If that's the case it will go over about as badly as someone putting a mom son role play in the incest category.

 

[jaF0]

Hi guys,
I need some help. I've posted five stories now and all five have ratings that are much lower than I think they should be.

And those scores are?

 

[Payne_Hall]

Its when one achieves orgasm from eating Chinese Food.

Oh, that’s what Kung Fu Panda was getting at.

 

[lovecraft68]

Oh, that’s what Kung Fu Panda was getting at.

Those kids movies always have subtle messaging in there for adults

 

[lovecraft68]

And those scores are?

https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=5834546&page=submissions

 

[jaF0]

'Bout the same as mine.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Is race play what it sounds like? Someone pretends to be a different ethnicity?
If that's the case it will go over about as badly as someone putting a mom son role play in the incest category.

No, it seems the characters are not pretending to be of a different race. Although "Operation Blacked" reminds me of The Human Stain in that a mixed-raced person pretends to be white.

The issue with interracial storied is: are you going for satire or playing it straight? If you were Chester Himes, you could do both in the same story, but few of us have his talent.

 

[Bramblethorn]

Is race play what it sounds like? Someone pretends to be a different ethnicity?
If that's the case it will go over about as badly as someone putting a mom son role play in the incest category.

Race play is usually about fetishising somebody's actual race. The typical "white guy cucked by black bull with gigantic dick" IR story is race play.

In BDSM it can include things like using racist insults as part of humiliation play, or slavery roleplay. The kind of thing where you want to be very very clear on what's in-scene and consensual vs. what's not.

(Not like age play, which is mostly about people pretending to be an age they're not.)

 

[gunhilltrain]

I have heard of it, although I don't know how common it is. Many years ago, I saw a listing on a dating site in which a white woman wanted Black men to come to her suburban house, either singly or in groups, and pretend to be her slaves. From the way she described it, they'd be there for hours doing various chores around her place.

I can't imagine what any Black man would get out of that scenario. The only thing that comes to mind is that they would stage a rebellion and ultimately rape their mistress. However, I don't think she mentioned that as an option.

It is weirdly funny that she imagined herself as Scarlet O'Hara or some similar person. I think she would dress up in 19th Century costumes. I suppose that would make it more fun when they finally ganged up on her and ripped her petticoats off. It sounds like it might work as a story in the Non-Consent/Reluctant category.

 

[Bramblethorn]

I tried "Hemingway's Lost Story". I think you did a decent job of emulating Hemingway's style, but the story is perhaps not a good match for his style.

Hemingway's trademark terseness depends on the reader filling in the blanks, particularly on character emotions. In his famous "For sale - baby shoes - never worn", most of us are familiar with the obvious reason why somebody might have never-worn baby shoes, and the devastating emotions that accompany that. Most of us have never been big game hunting, but we've heard enough about it to understand that being in the long grass with a wounded buffalo is bad.

Your story, in summary: guy + wife go hunting in Africa, guy hears about chieftain who's never been beaten and who adds the wife of any challenger to his harem. He immediately wants to fight the guy, which seems like an idiotic idea, but it's a familiar/believable brand of stupidity, so I could accept that much.

But his wife doesn't seem to have any strong feelings about it. She just passively accepts this huge transition from "American housewife" to "live in an African tribe forever as the concubine of a complete stranger". That's a huge blank for the readers to fill in. I don't know anybody who's made that kind of life change, I don't have a feel for how somebody would accept that idea, and the story doesn't help me with it. This story might have gone a little better in IR, where "white woman leaves husband for black guy" is a popular trope, but even there I suspect you'd find that a lot of readers want that kind of development explored more closely.

Beyond that, if you want to understand scores, you might have to turn your story comments on so readers can tell you what they did and didn't like.

 

[HusbandsSecret]

Thanks

Thanks, everyone! That helps.