My first story is live - would love feedback.

[fizzlej]

Hi everyone -

My first story is live here. It entails a young man losing his virginity via pegging to his taller, more dominant female friend. There are some homosexual fantasies involved but they don't play out yet.

I'm already working on sequels so am eager to hear what people think. Thank you!

 

[smutarranger]

I dropped a comment! Would love to hear your thoughts on my stories as well.

 

[AlexBailey]

That was a fun read that hit home for me in many ways.

I was a femme nerd in high school. Near the end of senior year a hot girl who had a college boyfriend took an interest in me. We did a lot of things but we never had sex and unfortunately she never pulled out a strap on. I would have loved that!

The one thing that took me out of the story was wondering about was why she had the gear. It sounds like her relationship with Mark is typical cis/het. She seemed to be discovering Seth’s softness and lack of size as the story progressed - things she probably would have been already acutely aware of if she had plans to peg him.

Also, I couldn’t really discern the setting of the scene. Where are they? In a bedroom? A locker room?

(Anyway, femme boy, swimsuits, pegging, strong athletic girls… all fun things I wrote about in my novel.)