my non-erotica story

[pyramider]

I just posted a non-erotica story. The two previous stories I posted were "EROTIC COUPLING" and "LOVING WIVES" and they attracted readres in the thousands.
I need to ask the LIT. readres for help. Perhaps this is not the right site to post non-erotica?
I would very much appreciate a feedback on all stories but now I humbly beg for feedback on the non-erotic one: "THE BOY WHO TALKED TO LIONS OR THE DAY THE ALIENS CAME"
Thanks

 

[kbate]

Naturally you will receive more reads in the erotica categories, in "Aliens" rather than the "AI" fixing the narrator's spine, they could fix his horniness. *not serious*

I think it is a fine story, but on Literotica you will get less reads without sex, simple fact. It is still a good site to post your short stories, and they will still be read.

 

[pyramider]

Thanks Kbate very much.

 

[pyramider]

Naturally you will receive more reads in the erotica categories, in "Aliens" rather than the "AI" fixing the narrator's spine, they could fix his horniness. *not serious*

I think it is a fine story, but on Literotica you will get less reads without sex, simple fact. It is still a good site to post your short stories, and they will still be read.

Know what- Been thinking about that and I just might write something along this line.. stay tuned. I am serious. Thanks

 

[alias x]

Anyhow, the story is quite enjoyable but the idea of a 1G machine fitted in the same place as a mention of Einstein feels awkward. A 1G machine would be trivial if not for the fact that Newton's laws are not totally accurate but rather are a simplification (or a model, if you prefer). Mentioning magnets as being able to provide anything useful makes me think bad thoughts. The only way I can envision dark matter and magnets working together to provide acceleration is if the magnetic dark matter could be shifted into regular matter, allowed to attract a ship, then shifted back to regular matter. Such a trick would result in the dark matter being moved in the opposite direction of the ship.

If you do insist on having a machine with constant acceleration, you'll need to have some reason that it is able to do so. Bear in mind that it takes *more* force to accelerate faster objects than slower ones. The difference is neglible at low speeds but at speeds approaching the speed of light it is not.

By the way, you might find more readers for your non-erotic fiction on elfwood.

And I should probably actually comment on the story itself. I really liked it. However, the science it used provided just enough detail to bring the various frauds tauting perpetual motion to mind, which was annoying.

 

[pyramider]

Anyhow, the story is quite enjoyable but the idea of a 1G machine fitted in the same place as a mention of Einstein feels awkward. A 1G machine would be trivial if not for the fact that Newton's laws are not totally accurate but rather are a simplification (or a model, if you prefer). Mentioning magnets as being able to provide anything useful makes me think bad thoughts. The only way I can envision dark matter and magnets working together to provide acceleration is if the magnetic dark matter could be shifted into regular matter, allowed to attract a ship, then shifted back to regular matter. Such a trick would result in the dark matter being moved in the opposite direction of the ship.

If you do insist on having a machine with constant acceleration, you'll need to have some reason that it is able to do so. Bear in mind that it takes *more* force to accelerate faster objects than slower ones. The difference is neglible at low speeds but at speeds approaching the speed of light it is not.

By the way, you might find more readers for your non-erotic fiction on elfwood.

And I should probably actually comment on the story itself. I really liked it.
Thanks for reading and commenting. Your observations on the science involved are all accurate. That's why nobody was ableto solve the problem sofat except that boy in the story. It is however posible to accelerrate bodies by ionizing light (or matter/energy) which nobdy was able to do sofar on constant basis. Gravity can be used like a slingshot and NASA used that principle launching some orbiters towards the outer planets. Of course I do not how to do either machine justise ot I would have invented rather than wrote science FICTION.
However, the science it used provided just enough detail to bring the various frauds tauting perpetual motion to mind, which was annoying.

Exactly.
Thanks very much.

 

[alias x]

You're missing my point. Science fiction is fiction. However, even fiction must obey it's own laws. In the case of science fiction, you are still bound by the laws of physics and whatnot. You can get around them if you either either take it for granted that you can do so, explain so vaguely that you may as well be taking it for granted, or provide an explanation which relies on some sort of currently unavailable science. In short, it is OK to rely on dark matter to move faster than light but it is not OK to provide a detailed yet incorrect explanation for why it is possible.

In my opinion, you made the explanation of why the kid's scientific studies works a little bit too specific.

 

[pyramider]

You're missing my point. Science fiction is fiction. However, even fiction must obey it's own laws. In the case of science fiction, you are still bound by the laws of physics and whatnot. You can get around them if you either either take it for granted that you can do so, explain so vaguely that you may as well be taking it for granted, or provide an explanation which relies on some sort of currently unavailable science. In short, it is OK to rely on dark matter to move faster than light but it is not OK to provide a detailed yet incorrect explanation for why it is possible.

In my opinion, you made the explanation of why the kid's scientific studies works a little bit too specific.

That's fair. Thanks very much for pointing me in Elfwood direction, I think it is suitable site for contemplative fiction. This story in particular I wabted to discuss science vs. religion and took literary license with the sofar known laws of physics. Tere is a small physics book "Star Flight Handbook" by Eugene Malove & Gregory Matloff and in part explains the possibilitiesd of interstellar travel. Few chapters are devoted to novel principles and amongst them is Gravity-Assist Tragectory. I hoped the readers will forgive me being very very vague witrh the detail so I don't overpower the main theme.
Your points are of course valid and well taken and I am grateful you took the time to read the story and comment. It is actually a condensed version of a longer story.
I think I'll post my speculative fiction in Elfwood (If they let me.) Thanks again.

 

[ETanker7]

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where is it?