My newest story

[gizmoo69]

Hey there,

I've got a new story that I just started today, so I thought I'd give you the first taste. Any additions, comments or criticisms will be welcome.

The Mum-Next-Door

Enjoy!

 

[gizmoo69]

Just wanted to let everyone know that I'll actually be rewriting the intro over the next few days (havent got time today), since I've decided that the current one is a bit too predictable. I'll be sticking with the same general concept though.

If you were hoping to add to this story, then I advise you to wait until probably tuesday and see how the story has changed.

 

[jakelyon]

I like the idea so I will be adding to it when it is ready to go.

 

[JamesKosub]

If you were hoping to add to this story, then I advise you to wait until probably tuesday and see how the story has changed.

I'll have a look and see what's been done.

I wouldn't exactly call the story predictable as it is. It's more blatant than anything else. I don't know about some folks, but I like to warm up to the action in a story, rather than plunge right in.

 

[gizmoo69]

I think you may be right, but then there's the whole 'grab your audience' thing. Nevertheless, take a look tomorrow, as I still haven't got time today.

I will probably still include the story as it stands, but divide it into two threads so I have the blatant option or branch off into an alternative.

 

[JamesKosub]

I think you may be right, but then there's the whole 'grab your audience' thing.

Understandable. I've been futzing around with a new story, myself, and after a few days of adding branches and whatnot, I'm still not into the sex. People will probably grow bored,

I will probably still include the story as it stands, but divide it into two threads so I have the blatant option or branch off into an alternative.

An excellent idea, and one that plays to the strengths of hyperfiction.

 

[gizmoo69]

OK, it's now ready for additions. Thought I'd branch off into something new (to me at least)...

The Mum-Next-Door

Opinions, additions, suggestions etc. would be greatly appreciated.

Incidentally, I think that as this story develops I'm gonna try and go for a power games type story, so any threads along those lines would be great. As ever though, it's your story as much as mine, so any decent threads will be accepted