My Nasty New Story...

[Guest]

I've got a new story posted on Literotica, called, 'Girlie Showers'.

It's all about a dark-haired Mistress, her blonde Slave and their Human Dog. I'm not really into the Dominance & Submission scene but I wrote it for my latest Muse, a wild American girl I met in a chat room, who likes her erotica NASTY - the more sordid the better. I always send her my stories, to see what she thinks. She didn't seem overly excited about, 'I Dream Of Maria...' (said it was "nice") but my tale of golden showers & general degradation in a burnt out warehouse seemed to push the right buttons with her.

One of my friend's fantasies is to have a man go down on her while he's being "taken" by another man from behind. I didn't feel comfortable about writing this story - it's just too far outside the realms of my own sexuality - so I changed some of the details. I prefer the Male-Female-Female set-up in my own writing.

Anyway, I'd love it if you checked the story out (it's pretty short) & fired some criticism - good or bad - back at me.

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Hey Roger, Although you are a very good writer, I have to say this story didn't do a thing for me. Golden showers are a total turn off for me, and unless you are into them, I guess this type of story wouldn't cut it. I suppose there are those out there that love this kind of thing. Each to his own I guess. As for the writing structure....no complaints.. Katerina

[This message has been edited by katerina (edited 05-08-2000).]

 

[Guest]

Hi, Katerina, thanks for replying.

I knew when I wrote 'Girlie Showers' that it was one of my more extreme efforts. In fact, I kind of set out to make it as debauched a story as possible. The language used, the dialogue of the characters (especially Mistress Marianne) and the actual content is all fairly 'nasty' (my online grrrly friend's favourite word). I like all kinds of erotic writing - from fairly romantic, sensual stuff (which you do very well, if I may say) to the extreme, raw experimentalism of Kathy Acker.

I felt it was about time I explored this darker side of my writing (and also wanted to impress my friend).

I like strong, independent, wild female characters (in life and in fiction), so I find Mistress Marianne a bit of a turn on but the actual Dominance & Submission stuff isn't really my thing. (Although, that's not going to stop me writing about it if that's what my audience asks for.) Likewise, that whole end sequence with the 'Steely Dan' does nothing for me, personally.

I've got no urge to have anyone urinate (or anything else) on ME, and I never understood how people could find watersports a turn-on. But a few years ago, I saw a French porn video with these stunning, fairly sophisticated looking women in beautiful, luxurious, period dresses who were, to put it crudely, "pissing all over each other's tits". I don't know why but, somehow that scene really affected me. I think it was maybe partly the clash between the 'niceness' of the apparel and hairstyling, and the 'dirtiness' of what they were actually doing. It's a major taboo, which always adds an element of forbidden danger, I guess.

*I'd just like to point out that it's NOT one of my major turn-ons* Perhaps one best kept aside for 'rainy days'.

*Footnote: people always assume that writers ARE their characters and that they want to do everything they've written about. It's not true.

Thanks for reading my story, Katerina. When can we expect more from you?

I've submitted a new one, starring that ill-fated femme fatale, Rachel Picabia. It's called 'Miss Babylon, 1997'. Should, hopefully see the light of day in a few weeks.

roger
xx

 

[Fiji Fanatic]

Roger your new online friend sounds interesting. I too have a very hot female online friend who likes her erotica, how shall we say it, "different".

I am trying to develop a story based on a premise similar to the one you rejected. My friend is a voyeur and is really hot to read a story featuring her lover giving oral pleasure to another man advancing to a poolside scene where the male lover is taken/pleasured by 3-7 men in a orgy-like fashion where he is the primary focus and responsible for consuming all of the others' cum. And, oh yes, the scene is played out as a performance in front a gathering of 10-15 other people, men and women.

I have posted this in the "story ideas" section and would certainly welcome your feedback.

Good luck with your stories.

 

[Guest]

Hi, there, Fiji,

I always assumed that while most men LOVE the idea of grrrls doing naughty things with other grrrls, women just weren't at all turned on by the thought of geezers going hard at it in the same way.

But the more I actually talk to women about this subject, the more I hear the same response - there are plenty gals out there who get all moist at the idea of good-looking men "playing" with each other.

One older woman that I used to work with (she was 45) said that the only hardcore porn that got her hot was gay porn.

Not long before I split up with my girlfriend (and this has nothing to do with why we split up, by the way. LOL), she was getting really into this British TV drama, called 'Queer As Folk', all about the gay community in Manchester. She absolutely adored the lead characters, and told me that sometimes when she masturbated she was fantasising about them putting on a "show" for her. LOL.

So, if nobody else takes up your story idea, you should have a go at doing it yourself. You seem to have plenty ideas already.

Sorry - but, I'm afraid I'm not the man for this particular job. As I'm sure you've all sussed out by now, it kinda turns me on to write about fiesty ladies. The guys never really interest me much. (That's why I never really liked gangster films - not enough women in them. Now I think about it - most of the erotica I read is by women, too.)

So, get writing, Feej.

roger

 

[Guest]

Dear Mr Simian. Hugely enjoyed Girlie Showers. Can we have more stories like these. I had more or less a similar experince once. I enjoyed and hated it at the same time. It was a turn on really. I also want to read more stories by you.
Rena

 

[Guest]

Hey, Rena,

I've got two more stories on Literotica - 'I Dream of Maria...' & 'Abby Bright's Quiet Night In' - and another one on the way. It'll probably be posted this week. They're not really like 'Girlie Showers', though. They're more from a female perspective.

I'll maybe try to write another nasty little story like that sometime.

There are also more of my stories on my own website.

When you say, you had a similar experience to 'Girlie Showers', what part do you mean? Two women & a man? The warehouse? The mistress? The watersports? The end scene?

Also, why did you enjoy it and hate it? I'm just interested to know.

Take care
roger

 

[Guest]

Dear Mr Simian,

It happened years ago but I still have flashes of the event. I was actually the 'slave'. There were two other women involved. It was when I was young actually. And it would be untrue if I say I hadn't enjoyed it. Though I pretend even now that I didn't like it.
By the way, what is the address of your website.
And please write those nasty stories. They are all true. Belive me.
Rena

 

[Guest]

Hi, Rena,

Have you thought about turning your experiences into a story, or are they too personal?

By the way, there's a link on my Literotica profile or at the beginning of 'I WANT YOUR TONGUE'.

roger