My Latest Submission

[awiseguy]

Let me try this again - I am looking for feedback for my latest story submission: A few days away: Day One

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=45174

Any input good or bad is much appreicated.

Thanks again,

awiseguy

awiseguy66@yahoo.com

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=45174

 

[Impetus]

Good story, good story.

I noticed that the primary focus of your story was on the emotions and circumstances surrounding the wife swapping rather than the actual sex involved. I'm thinking that in subsequent chapters this focus could shift, but for this one, at least, I think it made a very nice story. It wasn't the vapid sex-fest that I've seen some authors try to write, and I'm guessing that you weren't amining for that, but each type has it's plusses and minuses. Your story wasn't as painfully arousing as some i've read, but It was nonetheless fun to read and well written overall. The fact that the focus had been shifted really only served to make it a different kind of story. Not necessarily better or worse, that would depend on the reader's mindset and what it was that they were looking for. For me, at least, It was a fun story to read and I'd definitely be interested in reading the sequel.

-I

 

[awiseguy]

Thank you very much -

Concise and constructve criticism - exactly what I was seeking.

Thanks again,

Happy reading.

awiseguy