My last story-what do you think?

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"bad grammer
I liked it, but the grammer and spelling where poor.[ read more"


I think you can safely discount this comment by anon.

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You have several grammar problems - and your/you're problems.

I assume it is part of a planned series, otherwise the comments about a lot of buildup for small action are probably justified.
 
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things i'd like to see in the next installments:

a night out on the (small) town

a roll in the hay, up in the barn

both of the guys stuffing the narrator's holes

one of the guys taking the narrator's mom

what happens when daddy comes home

haha, of course, that's when you have to decide how far into the incest category your really want to take your stories, sweetheart
 
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