My first story

[stormrider21]

Hi. I just posted my first story on Chyoo recently, and I'd love to get some feedback on it. It's called The College Experience. It's obviously not finished yet, but I'm hoping to post a few threads every couple days, depending on how busy I am. So I'd love to know what everyone thinks so far. Let me know what you liked, what you didn't like, and what you'd like to see more of. As you can see, the intro can go in quite a few different directions. Once I finish off the current path, I'll go back there and follow the story with some of the other characters that were introduced. So let me know who you'd like to see more of.

thanks,
stormrider21

 

[Zingiber]

Since it's hard to browse to stories on Chyoo by name (Is there a way, anyone?), here's a link.

http://www.chyoo.com/dx/?dx=c&story_id=896

Good writing to you, Stormrider!

 

[yasnumoon]

I thought it was really good, and rated it a few days ago. Keep up the good work!

 

[stormrider21]

Thanks for adding the link, Zingiber. I didn't think about that.
And thanks for the encouragement. By the ratings, it seems that people like it. I'd still love to hear how to make it better though. Feel free to toss out suggestions.

-stormrider21