My First Story Submission

[LadyGenevieve]

I would really appreciate your feedback on my first submission. Female Dom/Spanking. Thank you.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=503715

 

[rbijon]

I would really appreciate your feedback on my first submission. Female Dom/Spanking. Thank you.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=503715

Very erotic imagery, even mystical.
& Oh, that arousing sting.

 

[SoCalCynic]

Excellent First Effort

You have a definite talent - you set the scene better than all but a small handful of writers here on Literotica. You definitely give the reader a visual setting in which to imagine the events of the scene.

My only quibble (sorry, the OCD volunteer editor rears his ugly head) - in the second sentence, did you mean "you" rather than "your"?

Keep up the good work!

 

[MisterMuffin]

I really enjoyed this! Loved the imagery, sensations and feelings it evoked... very mystical, sensuous and naughty!! Would loved to have been the guy in this story... the thought of you dominating me like this with all the sensations of the velvet, paddle and feathers would drive me crazy!!