My First story is up and...

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I'm curious as to what others may think of it.
Give it a read and leave feedback. I wrote a fairly short story regarding an actual event, and have other experiences that I'd like to share as well.
Let me hear from you.
Thanks

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=187599

 

[jeffreysub]

I liked it well enough, you might wanna try and make more shorter paragraphs though. It did have some arousing elements however and you did put a lot of effort into it. Keep on writing!

 

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Writing part 2 and...

I hope to have it up next week maybe. Since I've gotten some positive comments, I'm inspired to put into words the rest of that weekend spent in the neighboring state.
Thanks for the feedback.

 

[msboy8]

Great story thanks. I have voted and left a comment. Please keep writing.

Can't wait for part 2.

 

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Getting closer to the finish...

I hope to have it up by sunday evening anyway.

 

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Almost finished and...

I hope I put into words just how great it really was.
I know it really made me, you know, excited while trying to write it.