my first posted story.

[rudefox1]

I would like some feedback on my first story. It's in the NonConsent/Reluctance Stories. The title is "A Stormy Night".
Here is the link:
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=178395

I hope you like it.

 

[Guest]

I would like some feedback on my first story. It's in the NonConsent/Reluctance Stories. The title is "A Stormy Night".
Here is the link:
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=178395

I hope you like it.

Like it?

Like it???

I loved it!

Very refreshing and original. I've just left you a public comment, but I'll reiterate here:

I loved the form of the piece, very rhythmical, and the pacing was brilliant.

I usually steer clear of 2nd person stories, but you got me on that one. You pulled me right in and I felt as if it was directed at me.

One little quibble I had, was with your mention of the actual size of the cock. But, when I got to the part when the cock was being pushed into the ass - where you counted the inches - that did work.

I might have liked the action to be a little rougher, but that's just a personal taste thing.

Please write more! I think you are very talented.

Lou

 

[Lady Cassandra]

More! I want more!!!

 

[EmeraldAFlame]

Well done !

Like it? Oh yeah....defeinitely hot ! This was intimate enough to be believable, like a personal letter drawing the reading in from the start. My congrats on a great story. ~Emerald

 

[mikey10]

it was very very hot

nice,,,real nice

 

[dr_mabeuse]

Sorry, but after a while those one-sentence paragraphs started to sound like instructions for assembling a lawn mover or something:

Slip the hand grip onto the handle.

Insert the handle into slot H.

Place a washer on a two-inch stove bolt and slide through the hole in the handle.

Fit a crown nut onto the bolt and tighten into place.

Once I got that idea on my mind I couldn't get it out.

---dr.M.

 

[Texas Tease]

I really liked your story. I know a lot of people may complain about the style you used, but I think it worked. You aren't going to be able to please everyone all the time. The important thing is that the story was good...It got me all sorts of hot and bothered.

Actually, I think the reason I like it so much is because it reminds me of a fantasy I've had for a long time. I say well done, and keep up the good work. I want to read more of what you write.