My First Literotica Story

[Bella-36]

Hi Everyone...I'm kinda new here to literotica, but I posted my first story a few days ago. I'd love it if anyone could read it and give me feedback or critique me, since it's my first submission. It's about my first lesbian experience.

Thanks guys! Hope you enjoy it. Here's the link:

www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=99669

 

[pop_54]

Hi there

Hello and a warm welcome bella, I'll have a read of your story later.

Nice to meet you see ya later pops........

 

[Chicklet]

(now, this post should definitely be duplicated in the story feedback section)

xo
Chicklet

 

[MathGirl]

(now, this post should definitely be duplicated in the story feedback section)

Yes.
Grumpily,
MG

 

[LorriLove]

hiya

hiya bella honey, nice to meet you.

lorri xxxxxxx

 

[adoka]

My first story submitted

Hello everyone,

Long time reader first time writer. I submitted a story titled Rent money. http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=100472 I would appreciate any feedback that would help me improve my writing or just to let me know what you think of the story. I plan to submit much more in the future.

Thanks
Adoka.

 

[MathGirl]

Dear Adoka,
Conguatulations. If you really want some active feedback, read what Chicklet said above.
Estbay Ishesway,
MG