My First Effort

[CarolineOh]

I've recently posted my first story "A Night In His Arms" in the Interracial Love category, and I would welcome any feedback.
In particular, I'm interested in the balance between establishing mood and describing graphic action, and would appreciate advice on how to maintain it.
Thanks in advance!

Caroline

 

[chrisfromlondon]

Link

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=38574

Hi Caroline,

It's best to do a link so that people can go direct to your story. I only worked out how to do it today so hope you don't mind.

I will let you know what I think!

Chris

 

[CarolineOh]

Thank you for posting the link for me Chris. I'll be sure to do that from now on.

 

[chrisfromlondon]

Story

Hi Caroline,

My pleasure - hope it helped.

I thought your story was very good as a graphic and highly erotic description of hot love making and sexual activity. Personally, I like a bit more of a story to build up to the sex, but that is just personal choice. Some of the best votes do seem to go to the stories that get straight down to the nitty-gritty!

I look forward to more!

Chris

 

[CarolineOh]

Thanks again, Chris. I thought the best thing to do to combat the virgin jitters was to just jump right in.
Call me impetuous!

 

[Dean Cox]

Nice

Caroline...

I think you have just the right amount of graphical action as well the right mood for the story. Too much graphical description just makes the story sound like a poor attempt at something for a Razzle feature written by a 50 year old on a bus.

No, I think you've got just right I found it an arousing encounter look forward to more contributuions from you babe.

laterz

Dean

 

[CarolineOh]

Re: Nice

Caroline...

I think you have just the right amount of graphical action as well the right mood for the story. Too much graphical description just makes the story sound like a poor attempt at something for a Razzle feature written by a 50 year old on a bus.


Dean

I don't really know what a Razzle feature written by a 50 year old on a bus would be like, but it doesn't sound good, so I'm glad my story isn't like one!
Thanks for the input, Dean, I really appreciate it.