My first bomb

[Rob_Royale]

And it's in I/T of all places. I've had others that didn't do well, but those can be chalked up to 750 words and LW.
The plan was to do an unabashed slutty stepmom story. Her affairs are discovered and she's blackmailed by her stepsons friend.
Part 1 barely made it over the red H mark and took nearly a year to get there. Part two is being received poorly, not even reaching the four star mark. Clearly, I have erred somewhere. I thought it was a fun conclusion.

If anyone has some time to give me a review, I'd appreciate it.
Evelyn Ensnared Ch. 01 - 9100 words
Evelyn Ensnared Ch. 02 - 8900 words

 

[lovecraft68]

Without even looking I can tell you some issues

Step Mom is seen as a cop out among taboo purists and there are a lot of those.

Next, the step mom is screwing the son's best friend, and the 'mom should only be with the son' faction will now be displeased.

Blackmail isn't always well received there either. I/T crowd tends to like their stories to be either somewhat romantic or affectionate or fun stroke, getting into forcing someone to do something for whatever reason is a another sketchy box to tick.

 

[Rob_Royale]

Without even looking I can tell you some issues

Step Mom is seen as a cop out among taboo purists and there are a lot of those.

Next, the step mom is screwing the son's best friend, and the 'mom should only be with the son' faction will now be displeased.

Blackmail isn't always well received there either. I/T crowd tends to like their stories to be either somewhat romantic or affectionate or fun stroke, getting into forcing someone to do something for whatever reason is a another sketchy box to tick.

I was just trying do something a little different than the status quo. Step-mom fit the story better as I wanted both parents to have a history. Thanks.