My first attempt at a story

[JBmanly50]

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[lostandfounder]

If you want people to read it you'll have to post a link to it. Since they haven't updated the site, any new stories are the netherworld limbo between rejected and accepted and don't appear in the search functions on Chyoo.

Right now, the only way to get new stories any views is to link to them and advertise them on the forum here. The time of updating the site has passed on by it would seem.

 

[JBmanly50]

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[jakelyon]

I really like the start to the story. I like this type of introduction, the reluctant participant theme, and would like to add to it. I have one question, your summary shows 2nd person yet you have written the 1st thread in 1st person. Which do you want the story written in?

 

[JBmanly50]

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[jakelyon]

Yes you can quite easily. Go into the 1st thread of the story and click on the story name up in the upper right hand corner. That will bring up the about screen. Click on the edit section at the top of the page and that will allow you to edit the POV.

I screw it up all the time, that is why I asked. I will send you a thread in 1st person as that will be consistent with the story.

 

[Torg]

Nice story. The second thread was very hot. Some of that every week would keep me from going postal. I'll see about adding to it. Of course, if you add a thread to one of mine, I'll get to it quicker.

 

[JBmanly50]

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[jakelyon]

Added another thread to your story. Got some real nasty ideas on where to take this. Stay tuned...

 

[JBmanly50]

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