My festering rage

[grungalunga]

Figured id give the poetry thing a shot

People think love is real
it isnt
People think there is someone for everyone
there isnt
People think love is all you need
it isnt

Others think love is a crock
it is
Others think couples are random
they are
Others think love is the last thing you need
it is

Others think people are destined to die old and alone
they are

 

[Guest]

Figured id give the poetry thing a shot

People think love is real
it isnt
People think there is someone for everyone
there isnt
People think love is all you need
it isnt

Others think love is a crock
it is
Others think couples are random
they are
Others think love is the last thing you need
it is

Others think people are destined to die old and alone
they are

Nice. Can I play with your poem here?

 

[WickedEve]

Is My Festering Rage the title?

 

[grungalunga]

Is My Festering Rage the title?

I better reename it - I orignally had it going into this huge massive thing, more or less my big Fuck You to the women that rejected me over the years

 

[WickedEve]

I better reename it - I orignally had it going into this huge massive thing, more or less my big Fuck You to the women that rejected me over the years

Ah, I see. You say that you want to give this poetry thing a shot, so is this your first poem, or just the first one you've shared?

 

[grungalunga]

Ah, I see. You say that you want to give this poetry thing a shot, so is this your first poem, or just the first one you've shared?

1st poem, im not too much into the whole poetry thing. I think most of the time, its just someone trying to sound smarter than they really are.

 

[Trent_Dutch]

1st poem, im not too much into the whole poetry thing. I think most of the time, its just someone trying to sound smarter than they really are.

Lol...... It may be true (for some), but its not really the sort of thing you post on a forum populated mostly by poets, unless you are being purposefully antagonistic (in which case, you have my blessings or curses, I can't decide which).

 

[grungalunga]

Lol...... It may be true (for some), but its not really the sort of thing you post on a forum populated mostly by poets, unless you are being purposefully antagonistic (in which case, you have my blessings or curses, I can't decide which).

Just being honest - Im talking mainly about the crazy ones you see on tv that speak really fast in a rhythm - the kinds youd see in coffee houses dressed in black talking about how his feces is a symbol for society, who instead of clapping do that snapping horse-shit. The kinds who think that Cristo's orange sheets were real art.

Im not trying to offend anybody. Im just speaking my mind because you asked. I wish i could word it differently - so you could see Im just trying to be honest, not antagonistic. If I offended anyone, I am truly sorry, I will try to find a better way to word this later.

 

[WickedEve]

1st poem, im not too much into the whole poetry thing. I think most of the time, its just someone trying to sound smarter than they really are.

So, your poem made you sound smarter than you are? hmmm...
But yes, you're right. Most of the poets here are idiots without their poetry. Just don't tell them I said so.

 

[WickedEve]

I better reename it - I orignally had it going into this huge massive thing, more or less my big Fuck You to the women that rejected me over the years

This is what your poem should be about. Write one about those bitches.

 

[grungalunga]

So, your poem made you sound smarter than you are? hmmm...
But yes, you're right. Most of the poets here are idiots without their poetry. Just don't tell them I said so.

i think my poem made me sound insane. (if that one doesnt, wait until i post my next one) - I just threw my thoughts on paper. Like im doing a report or whatnot. Then I convert it into a poem somehow, in structure, theme, or rhyme scheme.

Thats what i did for the first one, thats what i'll prob do for the next one (assuming i do one)

 

[WickedEve]

Thats what i did for the first one, thats what i'll prob do for the next one (assuming i do one)

Do another one. And then another one and another. That's how the love of writing poetry begins. Then you'll turn into some poetry writing creature who demands praise for every word you write. Then one day you'll send me a love poem, and we'll have some freakish affair, with a bad breakup, leaving us both bitter and writing pissy poetry. So, go ahead and write another poem!

 

[Trent_Dutch]

Do another one. And then another one and another. That's how the love of writing poetry begins. Then you'll turn into some poetry writing creature who demands praise for every word you write. Then one day you'll send me a love poem, and we'll have some freakish affair, with a bad breakup, leaving us both bitter and writing pissy poetry. So, go ahead and write another poem!

Is that offer open to myself if I keep writing poetry?

 

[WickedEve]

Is that offer open to myself if I keep writing poetry?

"New poem reviews. Tuesday 22nd March.
...and try to get as many poems reviewed as I can (or at least review as many of the poems that I see, at least, the growing, glowing light of redemption in)."

Was my poem Ashes, Ashes mentioned? Did it have a glowing light of redemption? Will I extend that offer to you?



I suppose we could do the freakish affair part.



.

 

[Trent_Dutch]

"New poem reviews. Tuesday 22nd March.
...and try to get as many poems reviewed as I can (or at least review as many of the poems that I see, at least, the growing, glowing light of redemption in)."

Was my poem Ashes, Ashes mentioned? Did it have a glowing light of redemption? Will I extend that offer to you?



I suppose we could do the freakish affair part.



.

Like I said.... I tried to get as many poems in as I could. I was pressed for time. Plus... should you really profit from the pain you inflicted on others?

BTW Does this count as the bad breakup? I wasn't gonna write any love poetry, but the freakish affair was enticing.....

 

[WickedEve]

Like I said.... I tried to get as many poems in as I could. I was pressed for time. Plus... should you really profit from the pain you inflicted on others?

BTW Does this count as the bad breakup? I wasn't gonna write any love poetry, but the freakish affair was enticing.....

Pain I inflicted on others???

 

[grungalunga]

i take it there is some bad blood here?

 

[Trent_Dutch]

Pain I inflicted on others???

Quote.
'Our cruelty was a fly-wing lark,
each of us pulling them away.'

Maybe I've been reading it wrong... I thought this was a true story.....

 

[WickedEve]

i take it there is some bad blood here?

No. I'm sure he's teasing the way I was teasing about the review. I'm sure he absolutely adores me. Don't you, Trent?

 

[Trent_Dutch]

i take it there is some bad blood here?

I hope not.... would mean we were skipping all the good stuff to go onto the arguments.

 

[Tathagata]

Do another one. And then another one and another. That's how the love of writing poetry begins. Then you'll turn into some poetry writing creature who demands praise for every word you write. Then one day you'll send me a love poem, and we'll have some freakish affair, with a bad breakup, leaving us both bitter and writing pissy poetry. So, go ahead and write another poem!

and you wonder why the kids wont come in your yard to get the errant baseball.....

 

[Trent_Dutch]

No. I'm sure he's teasing the way I was teasing about the review. I'm sure he absolutely adores me. Don't you, Trent?

Yes Ma'am....

 

[WickedEve]

and you wonder why the kids wont come in your yard to get the errant baseball.....

Usually, their daddies come.

 

[WickedEve]

Figured id give the poetry thing a shot

People think love is real
it isnt
People think there is someone for everyone
there isnt
People think love is all you need
it isnt

Others think love is a crock
it is
Others think couples are random
they are
Others think love is the last thing you need
it is

Others think people are destined to die old and alone
they are

Earlier, I mentioned that you should try a poem about the women who have wronged you in some way. The poem above is okay, but I think one about some real experience you've had could be a lot better.

 

[Tathagata]

Usually, their daddies come.

I hope they return the favor