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How can this be made more erotic

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Jeff and Bob had grown up together since 10, a friendship of 15 years which ran deep in school and also while going to the same college. Having been together for 15 years and finding a job in the same city of California and sharing the same apt, the two 6ft hunky studs of similar built- Jeff with brown hair and Bob with black hair had their share of women.

They were in the swimming team and enjoyed playing waterpolo, wearing bikini swimwear revealed each others size. But then they had never bothered about it, they guessed the other was around 7 or 8, nearly the same. Once they came across Sharon who was extremely attracted to them and thought they were a sexy pair of study, she asked them at the pool if they ever measured as to who was the larger one.

Sharon “So which one of you has a bigger package”

Jeff “Maybe you have to check us out separately and give us the results”

Bob “Also tell us who is the better one..we never had a babe compare our techniques and style”

Sharon “Mmm will take you guys up on this offer”

Jeff “You are on…how about Thursday with me”, Bob “Friday is fine with me”

Sharon “What about Saturday, have U sexy studs done it together”

Jeff and Bob looked together “Never we don’t want to fight over the same chick, we couldn’t handle if she liked either one of us better.”

Sharon made passionate love to them both that week and finally gave the boys the result on Saturday “U guys it’s a tie, both get a 7 for the size and 8 overall”

Disappointed at not getting a 10, they asked her in unison “What could we have done to get a 10” Sharon replied “Nothing individually, as I need more than one to satisfy me, if U had combined forces, it was a sure 10”

This got Jeff and Bob thinking, but they left Sharon and never saw her again.

But the process started, they discussed it one evening while watching a porno which had a great DP scene. Jeff “Bob, are U as turned on as I am” Jeff “Yeah”, the guys stripped down to their bikini briefs soon in the dark living room in front of their gigantic TV set. A few minutes later Bob’s thighs suddenly touched Jeff’s causing a stirring sensation, they freezed for a moment and then laughed. Suddenly Bob jumped on Jeff saying that he wanted the remote and they wrestled for control. Their bodies intermingling and suddenly their crotches rubbing each other, they laughed and disentangled their aroused bodies. Jeff finally asked “Don’t u think it’s high time we tried a threesome and a DP, we are both excited by it and if we can’t do this together being so close, we definitely cannot do this with any one else” Bob replied “Fuck was thinking the same”

Jeff “Who do we get for this” Bob “Let’s go to a bar and pick up someone together- let’s tag team” Both dressed up in their sexiest and tightest trousers to attract a hot babe, and finally found Lisa standing at the bar. With courage the two of them approached her and asked her to join them at the table.

Jeff “Do you have any plans for tonight” Lisa “So which one of you is asking me out”

Bob “Both- we want to tag team tonight, we are childhood buds and never done this, but are sure hell going to do this tonight whether it’s you or someone else”

Jeff “Today it will be one lucky babe’s night of pure sex and a hot chance for some sweaty throbbing DP- are u wild and adventurous enough to try this with us”

Blown by the question Lisa said “I am game, but on one condition, it will not be anal”

Bob and Jeff looking confused “We want to try a DP – this is what has driven us to approach u”

Lisa “Of course but it will be both in my pussy- are U studs man enough to feel each others cock, is your friendship so tight that it can fill my pussy with your friendship”

Both Bob and Jeff looked at each other “This was not on our agenda and we are not gay, but we don’t have any issues with touching each other’s body”

Jeff “You have challenged our friendship and we will show you how tight it is and your pussy too” Bob “Alright babe U will be filled with fusion of our friendship”

Taking Lisa together in their arms, the three headed for their apt. Lisa was impressed that they lived together, and had a great 2 bedroom place. She asked. “So in whose bed do we fulfill our desires”

Bob said “Mine and from now on we two will even share the same bed”, Bob said “Done from today onwards will move into yours”

After passionate kissing the two studs slipped their slacks revealing each other hard cocks, they looked at each others, and said “We’ve never seen it or compared it, seems like it’s nearly the same and Sharon was right”

Lisa was getting extremely hot and Bob badly needed some pussy. Bob pulled her up on top of and his cock found its way into her pussy like an iron bar finds a magnet. As soon as they were mated, Jeff standing on the side was figuring out how he would fit in, excited and worried at the same time. Lisa was on fire…screaming aloud and frantically asking Jeff to complete her pleasure. Jeff “Bob, spread your thighs, am making the entry”, Bob spread his thighs, for Jeff to squeeze his butt between them and enter her hot hole. Suddenly Bob felt Jeff’s butt against his, as their baseball sized balls grinded against the other, Bob “Man what are u doing, your butt’s banging mine”. Jeff “that’s the only way, I can get in as well, so feel my hard one against your softer side”, Bob “U must be kidding mine is hard as stone, it’s yours which is a cushion”

Lisa “compare your butts later, first enter, am on fire”

Jeff, slowly pushed his rod over Bobs, placing it right on top of it, saying “always knew would be one up on yours” The three broke out laughing. After a couple of attempts, something seemed to give and Jeff popped right in rubbing together with Bob’s. The three moaned and groaned as they performed what amounted to a three-way fuck and accidently Bob instead of putting his arms around Lisa (in the heat of the moment) put his arms around Jeff’s back not realizing it and started rubbing Jeff’s back and tried to bring him closer in this sandwich. Jeff “Man your hot arms are rubbing my back and drawing me closer to the 2 of u’ Bob “What, isn’t this Lisa’s back, man why does it feel so hot & good” Bob continued to rub Jeff’s back, even after knowing it. Lisa was screaming and moaning, while the 2 buddies lost all their homophobia, were now touching each others hands and sucking on Lisa’s breast and neck.

The moans and the screams of the 3 were loud, the bed was rocking and on fire, the heat and the steam from the passion was now on the mirror. The 3 of their bodies was so tangled up that they were now just one, not knowing who was kissing whom, whose leg was rubbing against another, whose hands were on whose back. They were squirting and screaming as loud as they came. They finally collapsed on to the bed, with Lisa moving out a little between them, resulting Jeff to fall on Bob’s chest. They looked into each others eyes and Bob necked Jeff.

Lisa was now looking satisfied and yet sad, as this unbelievable experience had come to an end. She looked at the two friends and said, "You have spoilt me for ever- one will never be enough- and two may never work as good as both of you"

Bob looked at Jeff and said "For us too, it will now never feel tight enough doing it alone, what say bud ... do we continue this arrangement for a while, till we run out of new ideas"

Jeff "You got it man, I want the same hole as yours will be in"

Lisa "Now we are boyfriend,girlfriend and boyfriend, I will be the envy of everyone with 2 studs as my regular dates"

Jeff "We will be the envy of the guys, to have such a hot girlfriend to ourselves and regular threesome"

From that night onwards, Lisa moved in with the 2 and they dated together, suddenly one night Lisa called the two and said we need to talk "I am pregnant, I think you two have succesfully combined to impregnate me" Bob and Jeff were now worried as the arrangement had got complicated "Weren;t you on the pill"

Lisa "Yes but with 2 studs like you squirting together were no match for it"

Jeff "What do we do now- whose could it be?"

Bob "We will not know for another 6 months-hell, we seem to have fathered a child together Jeff- we now not only share a woman but also a child"

Jeff "Lisa - marry us, both of us, we can't live without you"

Bob "Yes, I need you and also Jeff - will you be wife to both of us, raising our common family"

Lisa "Yes, my dream is fulfilled, my two husbands and their child of love- what more could I ask"

The day came close to the delivery and Lisa gave birth to twins, not idenitcal but fraternal- one was Jeff's and the other was Bob's. Their family was complete.
 
mmmf

Maybe you could introduce a third guy. Maybe he could be called chuck. Instead of twins, she'd end up with triplets!
 
Is the "7 or 8" inches or centimeters? If it's centimeters, it could change the feeling of the whole story. :D
 
Yep, you took the words right out of my... Yeah, I won't go there.

Emotion. We know what they do and how they do it. How did they react, what were they thinking?

I'm sorry, but I found it very hard to read. Would you like an edit done on it, DPPBUDDY?

Lou :rose:
 
Tag Team Formula
Jeff and Bob had grown up together since 10, a friendship of 15 years which ran deep in school and also while going to the same college. Having been together for 15 years and finding a job in the same city of California and sharing the same apt, the two 6ft hunky studs of similar built- Jeff with brown hair and Bob with black hair had their share of women.

They were in the swimming team and enjoyed playing waterpolo, wearing bikini swimwear revealed each others size. But then they had never bothered about it, they guessed the other was around 7 or 8, nearly the same.
This really has little heat. Yet it's the first thing the readers see. The closer to the beginning, the less erotic the thing gets. Background does not belong at the leading edge of a story.
 
Lisa “compare your butts later, first enter, am on fire”

I take it that Lisa isn't a native English speaker. Chinese, perhaps?
 
dr_mabeuse said:
Lisa “compare your butts later, first enter, am on fire”

I take it that Lisa isn't a native English speaker. Chinese, perhaps?
Maybe. I also think Prince might be responsible for this post, what with all the use of "u" in place of "you". :rolleyes:
 
dr_mabeuse said:
Lisa “compare your butts later, first enter, am on fire”

I take it that Lisa isn't a native English speaker. Chinese, perhaps?

Actually, I thought Vietnamese...

"Oooh, me so horny. Compare butts later, first enter, am on fire. Me love you long time..."

:rolleyes:

Q_C
 
And cut out the derogatory "chick" and "babe"....be real not cliche'.
You have the basis for a good story but it needs to be fleshed out...as Lou said, it needs emotion.
:rose:
 
Quiet_Cool said:
Actually, I thought Vietnamese...

"Oooh, me so horny. Compare butts later, first enter, am on fire. Me love you long time..."

:rolleyes:

Q_C

I just had a flashback to that Southpark episode....

"Sucky sucy fi dollah"
 
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